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GA Review

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.

  1. Is it well written?
    A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
    Well done.
    B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
    In the Post-war period section, it would be best if "Stanley Cup" were linked once, per here. In the Detroit Red Wings section, I doubt that Gordie Howe "played" hockey with Massachusetts senator Ted Kennedy; the link might have to be fixed. In the Expansion section, it would be best if "Los Angeles", "San Francisco", and "St. Louis" were linked once.
  • Fixed all. In the latter case, the double links to LA, SF and St.L pointed to different articles. I removed all of the city links from the first set for simplicty and to reduce confusion.
  1. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
    A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
    B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
    Does Reference 7 cover all this ---> "At Dutton's request, he was replaced by Clarence Campbell. Campbell served as the NHL's third president from 1946 until his retirement in 1977. The stability Campbell offered as president was matched by that of the league itself. The NHL remained fixed at the same six teams for the first 21 years of his presidency, until the 1967 NHL Expansion"? Does Reference 20 cover all this ---> "The fans leaving the Forum were met by a mob of angry demonstrators outside. The mob grew to 10,000 people, overwhelming the 250 police officers on the scene, and rioted outside of the Forum. Order was not restored until 3 a.m. Seventy people were arrested, 37 people injured, 50 stores were looted and $100,000 in property damage was reported in the violence, which became known as l'affair Richard, or the Richard Riot"?
  • In both cases, yes. The Pincus book (The Illustrated History of the NHL) has several profiles of people and events. The two listed cites are to such profiles, of Clarence Campbell and the Richard Riot, respectively.
  1. C. It contains no original research:
    D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
  2. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
    B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
  3. Is it neutral?
    It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
    In the lead, this ---> "one of the greatest players of all time", sounds like POV.
  • Removed. That was added by another editor, and I understand what they were trying to do. I plan on expanding the descriptions of players such as Howe before trying for FA. This will address that editor's concern as well, I hope.
I sorta got the feeling that that was the case, but it still needed to re-worded. Check. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 21:53, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Is it stable?
    It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
  2. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  3. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    If the above statements can be answered, I will pass the article. Good luck with improving this article!

--  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 21:32, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Should be fixed. Thanks for the review! Resolute 21:43, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you to Resolute for getting the stuff I left at the talk page, because I have gone off and placed the article as GA. Congrats. ;) --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 21:53, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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