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Reviewer: Elli (talk · contribs) 06:11, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

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Quite an interesting article from a glance. Not seeing any quickfails - I tend to go through section by section to look at refs / grammar / etc. Should have a good amount looked/reviewed at within the next twenty-four hours. Elli (talk | contribs) 06:11, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Image licensing

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Overall, not really any issues - the iffiest one is File:QaMi 1+2.jpg, everything else seems non-problematic to me. As File:QaMi 1+2.jpg is from 2006, when our requirements for permission were, if I remember correctly, much less strict, I think it's reasonable to assume that the file was indeed uploaded with permission from the original sculptor, so there aren't any images in the article that must be removed or replaced. Elli (talk | contribs) 10:52, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I un-wonked the description for the KTZ comparison - I wish I could remember what I was doing there, but I don't have the foggiest. If the sculptural image is problematic, it can be removed - it's not hugely important. As for Kalicho, I have to assume that's boilerplate text on the British Museum's part - they can hardly put licensing restrictions on something that was drawn in 1577, lol. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 20:30, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good - up to you on File:QaMi 1+2.jpg, I don't have a strong opinion there. Elli (talk | contribs) 01:17, 29 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Prehistoric development

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  • Evidence for the earliest origins of the Inuit clothing system is therefore usually inferred from sewing tools and art objects found at archaeological sites.[1] - I'm going to be assuming good faith for the offline/paywalled references here (and throughout most of the article) that they are used appropriately/accurately.
  • In what is now Irkutsk Oblast, Siberia, archaeologists have found carved figurines and statuettes at sites originating from the Mal'ta–Buret' culture which appear to be wearing tailored skin garments, although these interpretations have been contested. The age of these figurines indicates that, if the interpretations are correct, a clothing system very similar, albeit not directly related to, the Inuit clothing system may have been in use in Siberia as early as 24,000 years ago. the phrasing on this is quite awkward - too many qualifiers. Maybe write something like In what is now Irkutsk Oblast, Siberia, archaeologists have found carved figurines and statuettes at sites originating from the Mal'ta–Buret' culture which appear to be wearing tailored skin garments, although these interpretations have been contested. The age of these figurines indicates that a clothing system similar to that of the Inuit may have been in use in Siberia as early as 24,000 years ago. - the "may" in the second sentence is sufficient given the qualifier in the first sentence.
  • I swiped your wording wholesale.
  • Third paragraph - link "taboos"? (also, kinda curious why they had taboos preventing it but only at coastal sites, but not sure if that's explained or in scope of the article)
  • Done. As to the question, I've got no clue, and I didn't think it was really in-scope so I didn't go hunting for an explanation.
  • A wooden figurine from Ellesmere Island actually has miniature trousers made of bear skin, a feature which Inuit skin clothing expert Betty Kobayashi Issenman noted was, to her knowledge, completely unique on prehistoric figurines. - maybe I'm not getting why this is interesting - is the feature unique among all discovered Inuit figurines? Because it doesn't seem like really a big deal, yet it's presented as such here.
  • It's unique because most prehistoric carved figures are found as just carvings. This one actually has little doll pants made of actual bearskin, and the fact that the pants survived to be found in the present day is a huge deal.
  • I tried a BEFORE search on her, but didn't find enough independent content to hit GNG, and I don't think she meets NPROF as an independent academic, so I de-linked her. Sinews of Survival dings NBOOK though so I'm likely to create an article on that eventually.
  • have been dated to the early Thule era, around 1000 years ago just for consistency/clarity, I'd consider writing 1000 CE (or, well, whatever the source said).
  • Mmm, the source says "a thousand years old" rather than giving a specific date. I wasn't able to find anything more specific, so I'm not sure I want to get more specific either, in case I'm overstating the source.
  • Clothing items including a kamleika, or gut-skin coat, were found at a dig site on Ellesmere Island in 1978. I think the clause middle might be better as a parenthetical (and more descriptive, as "gut-skin coat" isn't a phrase people know instinctively).

@Premeditated Chaos: Overall, not too many issues in this section (though wow, this is quite dense to read - but I guess it's just a complicated and niche topic, so I should've expected that -_-). Elli (talk | contribs) 04:29, 29 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

European contact

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  • Images (both in this section and not under the subheading) look fine.
  • Due to a lack of records, it is difficult to pin down the earliest point of contact between Europeans and the Inuit, but it is believed to have occurred in Greenland after 1150.[25] The Norse had colonies in Greenland from 986 to around 1410, and the Thule began migrating there from North America as early as 800.[25][26] a few things - first, the reference in McGovern is split across p. 335 and 336. Secondly, the order here doesn't make sense - I'd do something like Due to a lack of records, it is difficult to pin down the earliest point of contact between Europeans and the Inuit. The Norse had colonies in Greenland from 986 to around 1410, and the Thule began migrating there from North America as early as 800; [25][26] contact between the groups is believed to have occurred after 1150.[25]
  • Swiped your wording again
  • The earliest known European depictions of living Inuit were advertising broadsides printed in Germany in 1567, which depict an anonymous Inuit woman and her child who had been kidnapped from Labrador in 1566. I am curious if we potentially have this image?
  • I just found a copy and uploaded it to Commons, and will stuff it into the article. (Actually, this wound up shoving enough other stuff down that I had to pitch the sculpture photo anyway, so that solves that.)
  • Women's clothing was seen as particularly inappropriate, as the cut of certain garments could expose their trousers or even their bare thighs, so they were often pressured into wearing long skirts or dresses to conceal their legs.[32][33][34] just curious - why three refs on this?
  • Mm, I figured anything to do with religious oppression is probably at least vaguely contentious - people do be protective of their religion - so I figured better to err on more refs than fewer. Plus, iirc without double checking, each ref referred to this happening in a different area of the arctic, so we also get confirmation that it was widespread and not confined just to one place.
  • International trade, particularly in the form of the fur trade and the whaling industry, was also implicated in unwanted changes to Inuit clothing. Following the 1783 establishment of a Russian trading post on Kodiak Island in what is now Alaska, use of sea otter and bear pelts for traditional garments was restricted, because the Russians preferred to sell these valuable pelts internationally.[35] I'm not a huge fan of the passive voice here - looking at the source, I think phrasing it like International trade, particularly in the form of the fur trade and the whaling industry, was also implicated in unwanted changes to Inuit clothing. Russians, after establishing a trading post on Kodiak Island in 1783, restricted the use of sea otter and bear pelts for traditional garments, preferring to sell these valuable pelts internationally.[35] would be clearer. In fact, since the source says "denied", you could go further and say International trade, particularly in the form of the fur trade and the whaling industry, was also implicated in unwanted changes to Inuit clothing. Russians, after establishing a trading post on Kodiak Island in 1783, prevented the from using sea otter and bear pelts for traditional garments, preferring to sell these valuable pelts internationally.[35]
  • Used a tweaked version of your second version.

Just a few things in this section. Doing the subsection next, of course. Elli (talk | contribs) 20:39, 5 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Purposeful adoption of foreign garments

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  • In other cases, seems unnecessary.
  • I expanded it a bit for flow with the previous section. Just nuking it and starting with "The Inuit adopted..." felt abrupt.

No other issues in this section (sorry). Elli (talk | contribs) 14:31, 7 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Decline since the nineteenth century

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  • The production of traditional skin garments for everyday use has declined in the twentieth and twenty-first centuries as a result of loss of skills combined with shrinking demand. The introduction of the Canadian Indian residential school system to northern Canada, beginning with the establishment of Christian mission schools in the 1860s, was extremely destructive to the ongoing cycle of elders passing down knowledge to younger generations through informal means.[56][57] is ref 56 necessary here? the source is not used anywhere else and seems kinda redundant.
  • Yeah I can ditch it.
  • Purchasing manufactured clothing saves time and energy, and it can be easier to maintain than traditional skin clothing.[65] minor grammar issue - I'd rephrase to something like Purchasing manufactured clothing saves time and energy, as manufactured clothing can be easier to maintain than traditional skin clothing.[65]
  • Interestingly, the decline in the use of traditional clothing coincided with an uptick in artistic depictions of traditional clothing in Inuit art, which has been interpreted as a reaction to a feeling of cultural loss.[72] curious if you could provide a brief quote from the source here - I don't inherently have a problem with the word "interesting", but I'd like to make sure it's not editorializing.

No other issues I see - the image is also fine. Elli (talk | contribs) 12:06, 10 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Modern revitalization efforts

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  • First image looks fine.
  • the Yukon I thought this was poor grammar - but apparently people actually call it this? sigh, can't blame you when the article on Yukon does the same thing.
  • Yeah this is just a grammatical quirk I grew up with and can't get over; it was "the Yukon Territory" till 2003.
  • Doesn't matter for a GA, because it's easily verifiable, but Nunavut was not partitioned out from the Northwest Territories until 1999. should have a source.
  • It doesn't actually need a source per WP:MINREF/WP:WTC - the date is not contentious and is unlikely to be challenged.
  • In the present day, many Inuit wear a combination of traditional skin garments, garments which use traditional patterns with imported materials, and mass-produced imported clothing, depending on the season and weather, availability, and of course, a desire to be stylish.[85] I hate to be that guy but the last part of this doesn't sound encyclopedic (the "of course")
  • Ahhhhh ya got me. Tweaked.
  • Amauti may be worn over fabric leggings or jeans, for example.[86] I'd put "for example" before, not after, the main clause
  • Moved
  • Store-bought garments may be adjusted or repurposed to suit northern needs. Seamstresses may add fur ruffs to the hoods of store-bought winter jackets.[87] Boot tops made of skin may be sewn to mass-produced rubber boot bottoms to create a boot that combines the warmth of skin clothing with the waterproofing and grip of artificial materials.[88] this is kinda clunky. I'd try something more like Store-bought garments are often repurposed or adjusted—seamstresses may add fur ruffs to the hoods of store-bought winter jackets,[87] and boot tops made of skin may be sewn to mass-produced rubber boot bottoms to create a boot that combines the warmth of skin clothing with the waterproofing and grip of artificial materials.[88] (I'm a big fan of em dashes, probably more than appropriate, but you get the picture—I think these should be combined into no more than two sentences, and probably one.
  • This was actually an effort to get away from my normal tendency to write very long sentences :P
  • Skin clothing is preferred for winter wear, especially for Inuit who make their living outdoors in traditional occupations such as hunting and trapping, or modern work like scientific research.[67][71][90][91] please trim to two refs or put these directly next to what they're verifying
  • Mm, I really hate refs in the middle of sentences, and there's no actual MOS limit on the number of sources that can be cited at the end of a sentence. Four is a little on the high side, but it's not out of line. I'd prefer not to drop any of them since they each verify a portion of the sentence.
  • Traditional skin clothing is also preferred for special occasions like drum dances, weddings, and holiday festivities.[92][91] out of order refs
  • Fixed
  • Ulukhaktok was formerly called Holman. another "FA review will probably want a cite here, also not sure if indicating that it's located in the Northwest Territories is really necessary.
  • I don't see why we shouldn't, it's not as though the average reader will recognize the name. Same comment re: citing Nunavut's partition date, this is uncontentious and unlikely to be challenged.
  • Guessing the shirt is referring to the sentence Many imported garments like T-shirts and sweatshirts feature logos and images from Inuit culture, such as Inuit organizations, sports teams, or musical groups.[89]? Might move it up a paragraph or so. Also not relevant to most of the passage, so it felt a bit out of place - maybe expand on this a bit? The article's topic of "Inuit clothing", for the most part, seems to be "traditional clothing of the Inuit, and how it blends with modern society" - not "anything the Inuit wear", so this feels a bit off-topic.
  • I rearranged the images so the shirt is up in this section now. As for the relevancy - funnily enough if you look at Talk:Inuit clothing you can see a complaint about the opposite, basically that the article(s) ought to cover "anything the Inuit wear". In this case I thought the cultural blending was relevant - like yeah the Inuit are importing T-shirts, but they're also putting symbols of Inuit identity on them, basically reclaiming these "foreign" garments as their own in a small way. I could probably dig through my stash of as-yet-unused "contemporary Inuit fashion" sources to see if there's anything more, but I don't remember anything substantive.

No other issues as far as I can tell. Elli (talk | contribs) 05:12, 11 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Contemporary fashion

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(ooh, the spicy section)

  • Beginning in the 1990s Pauktuutit began to promote Inuit fashion outside of the Arctic by collaborating with Canadian museums, exhibitions, and festivals to showcase Inuit-designed garments.[103][104] grammar (needs a comma after "1990s")
  • Done
  • The response to these events was positive, and in 1998, Pauktuutit launched a program called "The Road to Independence", which aimed to provide Inuit women with the skills to design, produce, and sell garments in the contemporary fashion industry, to promote their economic independence.[105] could be tightened - like The response to these events was positive, and in 1998, Pauktuutit launched a program called "The Road to Independence", which aimed to promote Inuit women's economic independence by providing them the skills to design, produce, and sell garments in the contemporary fashion industry.[105]
  • Wound up being the same length but it reads nicer
  • Not sure if the throat singers image is exactly relevant, here?
  • Yeahhhhhhhh ultimately I think you're right. I moved it back up. What I really want is a photo of one of the Project Atigi parkas, or another garment from the designers of one. Actually, fuck it, I've been putting off sending emails and I will go do that now.
  • Note [e] should go right after "Ava" instead of at the end of the sentence.
  • All the other notes are at the end of sentences. I'm gonna leave it.
  • I'm pretty sure the design is out of copyright at this point, meaning that a free image could be created (and additionally, this image is more unfree than necessary, as the garment is the only part that is inherently unfree even accepting that argument, while the actual photo here is also unfree). However, there is a decent argument to be made that it isn't realistically possible to go out and take a photo of either the original or the knock-off (as it was pulled) in which case I'd recommend updating the fair use rationale to explain that.
  • Hmm. Stand by. Okay, I've swapped it for a stack comprised of a free image of the parka and a separately-uploaded fair-use version of the KTZ parka. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 02:38, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

For how spicy this section was, there are very few issues here. Elli (talk | contribs) 00:29, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

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No issues here, what concerns I've had with notes I've mentioned above. Elli (talk | contribs) 00:33, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

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So pretty! Obviously, not problematic. Elli (talk | contribs) 00:33, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Bibliography

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This looks good - I haven't made sure every source is in use, though - you may want to double check that. Elli (talk | contribs) 00:33, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Unsure if the link here is particularly relevant. The navboxes here are fine. There's some redundancy in categories, for example, this is in both Category:Inuit history and Category:History of Nunavut - the former category is in the latter. Elli (talk | contribs) 00:33, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • EL pulled. I think the redundancy is an unfortunate side effect of the way our categories are structured. Not all Nunavut history is Inuit history, and not all Inuit history is centered in Nunavut. Not a hill I'll die on though. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 03:07, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Premeditated Chaos: looks pretty good - I'll do the lead next, then make sure you've addressed everything to an appropriate extent, then I think I can pass the article. Elli (talk | contribs) 00:33, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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@Premeditated Chaos: Looks good - accurately summarizes the body. Not seeing any more particular issues so I'll whip out the GA box template and see about passing this. Sorry for how long this review took. Elli (talk | contribs) 03:54, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Nice job with this article! Elli (talk | contribs) 03:56, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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