Talk:Hill 303 massacre/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Woody (talk) 19:43, 15 September 2010 (UTC)

Criteria

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   See below for some questions on Jargon. In general, ok prose wise. Would need a copyedit before any higher assessment is attempted. Take "Hill 303" section for example, 4 sentences in a row begin with "it".

   Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:12, 23 September 2010 (UTC)

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

   I fixed a few date and time formats to American English but otherwise seems MOS compliant.

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   Varhola is used in the notes but no further information is provided. The Harvard notes for McCarthy don't link to the bibliographic information like it is supposed to.

   Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:12, 23 September 2010 (UTC)

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   All US-Army free licences

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   Suitable captions, alt text provided.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   On hold until the slight jargon and referencing issues below can be sorted Woody (talk) 19:43, 15 September 2010 (UTC)

   I think I have fixed everything. —Ed!^(talk) 01:12, 23 September 2010 (UTC)

   All sorted. Woody (talk) 18:09, 24 September 2010 (UTC)

Jargon questions

• In "Korean War begins" it says "after the defeat of Task Force Smith" but nowhere is it explained what Task Force Smith is.
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 03:07, 16 September 2010 (UTC)
• Jargon: again in the "begins" section: "They advanced on UN positions with armor and superior numbers" Could you reword to avoid the use of armor, perhaps explain it on the first instance, or link Armoured warfare somewhere. My point is that the uninitiated reading this article won't know what armor is staight away.
  • Linked. —Ed!^(talk) 03:07, 16 September 2010 (UTC)
• In "imprisonment:" "heavy artillery preparations pounded" what are heavy artillery preparations?
  • Reworded. —Ed!^(talk) 03:07, 16 September 2010 (UTC)