Talk:Hilary Smart/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TLSuda (talk · contribs) 02:50, 22 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Greetings! I'm taking this GA review and I see you've been waiting for a few months. I will do my first read-through and my initial review should be posted in the morning. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 02:50, 22 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

The second time that Paul Smart and Libbey-Owens Ford are each mentioned does not need to be wikilinked (per WP:OVERLINK)
Do we know or can we find Smart's mother's name?
In the lead you say he became VP of Libbey-Owens-Ford but later you say Libbey-Owens Ford Sales Co. Which is it? And we don't need multiple links.
It seems like Paul Smart is extremely notable. I would include information about him in the sentence that states he is Hilary's father. Maybe something like "His father was Paul Smart, a famous sailor..." or something.
Do we have any more information about his sailing in college? Its only mentioned that he won a championship.
There should be more information about how he became a competitor in the Olympics. We go from him attending University to being a competitor but nothing in between.
Why were the Smarts disqualified from the sixth race?
He qualified for the World Championships, but did he participate? If so what were his results?
Was there nothing else of note in his life? If not that's okay.

This concludes my initial review. I look forward to seeing your response. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 14:39, 22 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@Wirenote: Have you had a chance to look at the review and make changes? It has been over a week of no response. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 01:06, 3 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

✗ Fail Failing this GA nomination for lack of response and no work done on the issues. TLSuda (talk) 23:27, 27 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]