Talk:High School Musical: The Musical: The Series/GA1
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 13:25, 13 April 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:25, 13 April 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Per the template, genres need sources.
- The "list_episodes" parameter is unnecessary per infobox television.
- Runtime also needs a source.
- In the lead, add a serial comma after Mark St. Cyr.
- Also add a serial comma after "ABC".
- Done. I did my best at sources for the genres and runtime. SatDis (talk) 01:47, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
Premise / Cast and characters
[edit]- Considering the Casting has become rather complicated with Season 3 I decided to make a Draft:List of High School Musical: The Musical: The Series cast members. Some information may be incorrect or incomplete due to season 4 being still in production. Thoughts?
Episodes
[edit]- "practise" → "practice" (consistency with article)
- "implores for the" → "implores the"
- Remove the commas after "separating" and "romantic moment".
- There appears to be a word missing between "prevent her overthinking".
- "The cast discover" → "The cast discovers"
- Per MOS:TVPLOT, plot summaries should be "no more than 200 words per episode"
- Episode three is at 206 words.
- Episode seven is at 208 words.
- Episode ten is at 206 words.
- Done. All episodes are now under 200 words. SatDis (talk) 01:47, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
Production
[edit]- "which depicted" → "that depicted"
- Remove the comma after "commenced in February 2020".
- "present day" → "present-day"
- Add a serial comma after Howard Ashman.
- The quote in the reference after "idea for a series" doesn't seem necessary.
- The phrase "write drafts of a script" sounds wordy, so try rewording.
- The last sentence in the second paragraph seems out of place. Try moving it to the first.
- Done. SatDis (talk) 01:47, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
Release
[edit]- Fix the [better source needed] issue.
- Add a serial comma after "ABC".
- "labelled" → "labeled"
- Add a comma after "January 17, 2020" per WP:DATECOMMA.
- Per WP:TRAILER, #Marketing should not simply list when trailers were released, but reactions people had to them.
- I have decided to remove the "Marketing" section as I don't believe it is necessary. SatDis (talk) 01:47, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
Reception
[edit]- Excellent #Critical_response section! Not too many quotes, which passes WP:RECEPTION.
- Accolades is missing a Artios Awards nomination.
- Also, shouldn't the nominees column be after "category"?
- Wow, thanks for the feedback! Usually my "Critical response" section isn't up to scratch. Thanks for finding the nomination, fixed. SatDis (talk) 01:47, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
References
[edit]- The Futon Critic can be archived using archive.today.
- PopSugar is not reliable, so I would remove/replace it.
- Mark references from Los Angeles Times with "|url-access=limited".
- Thanks for the tips. Fixed. SatDis (talk) 01:47, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
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Response
[edit]- Addressing suggestions now. SatDis (talk) 00:49, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
- @Some Dude From North Carolina: All suggestions addressed above. Thanks so much for the review. Please let me know if there are any further suggestions. SatDis (talk) 01:47, 17 April 2021 (UTC)