Talk:Hibiscus (restaurant)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs) 21:35, 27 September 2012 (UTC)

Lead

• " In July 2006, Bosi and his wife announced that they were to sell the location in Ludlow and move closer to London. The location was sold to Alan Murchison". You don't sell locations, you sell leases, property etc. Why should we care when they announced their intention to sell anyway? The significant thing is when they sold to Murchison. In 2006?

• There's nothing about the menu in this section, which seems like rather a big oversight in an article about a restaurant.

Description

• What is this section supposed to be a description of?

Menu

• "He has been described as an innovator and has been compared to the work of Heston Blumenthal at The Fat Duck." You can't compare one person with the work of another. What about something like " ... his work has compared to that of Heston Blumenthal at The Fat Duck"?

• "Other dishes has included roast chicken ...".

• "... and deserts include a chocolate tart". None of the deserts I've visited have included chocolate tart.

• "Molecular gastronomy techniques are used, such as in the process for making a Savoy cabbage purée; where the cabbage is freeze dried into a powder and then reconstituted into the purée." The punctuation is all to cock there. What follows a semicolon must be a complete sentence, and "where" doesn't make sense in that context anyway, as a process isn't a place.

• "However, Bosi does not believe in using unusual techniques to change the flavour of ingredients, only to enhance them." All ingredients don't share a single flavour, so that ought to be "flavours". Also, the way it's written makes it look as if he's enhancing the ingredients rather than their flavours, which I doubt is what's meant.

• Overall, this section seems rather light. I don't even have a clear idea of what style of cooking the menu offers. Is it basically a French restaurant? Do they do a nice chicken curry with egg fried rice?

History

• I don't understand why this section doesn't come immediately after the lead, which would avoid the repetition in telling us twice in quick succession about the move from Ludlow and so on.

• "Hibiscus re-opened in October 2007 in its new location after it was delayed by building works and planning delays." It wasn't Hibiscus that was delayed, but the building/refurbishment work.

• "Bosi admitted later that the restaurant was not yet up to scratch in those two weeks and agreed with the decision which led to Michelin downgrading Hibiscus to a single Michelin star in the 2009 Guide." That's a bit round the houses. The decision was to downgrade Hibiscus, it didn't lead to a decision to downgrade Hibiscus. And shouldn't that be "2008 Guide"?

• " During the run up to Christmas, the stress of serving 550 covers a week in a new location with a modified menu resulted in three sous chefs asking to leave." You don't have to ask permission to leave a job, you simply resign.

• "He intended for the new Hibiscus to be open by September, and to transfer over the menu style he had used in Ludlow". I'm sure it wasn't the "menu style" he was transferring; a folded A3 format with a pretty italic script?

• Wasn't Bosi's wife Claire originally manager of the restaurant, and hasn't she now left him?

Reception

• "He thought elements of the meal was 'very clever indeed' ...".

• "While he thought the highlight of the trip was a dish of venison served with a confit of pear confit in mulled wine...". Why not link "confit" in "pear confit", to avoid having to repeat "confit"? As in "served with a pear confit"?

• Ok, I think I've addressed everything except for the menu section being too light and the error in my part in omitting Claire Bosi. I'll get those added either tonight or tomorrow evening (depending on whether I get side tracked with a different article or not). I've also merged the description into the history - for this article it didn't make sense and resulted it in being repetitive, almost like a second lead. Miyagawa (talk) 16:53, 1 October 2012 (UTC)

  Great improvements. I think this article now meets the GA criteria. Malleus Fatuorum 20:32, 1 October 2012 (UTC)

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