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Reviewer: Rp0211 (talk2me) 18:39, 14 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]


GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it well written?
    A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
    B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
  2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
    A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
    B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
    C. It contains no original research:
    D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
    B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
  4. Is it neutral?
    It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
  5. Is it stable?
    It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
  6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:


Infobox
  • I could not find a reference that supported recording being done in 2008 throughout article  Done
Removed. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • No reference in article supporting hip hop as a genre on the album  Done
Removed genres apart from R&B, as that is the main genre. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
  • "Usher divorced from Foster in 2009." - Not sure if necessary in lead  Done
I don't see why not as the lead should summarise the article's main info. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Background
  • "Shortly before the album's release..." - Add comma at end  Done
That sounds odd to me when I read it out loud. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It is necessary punctuation. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In December 2005..." - Add comma at end  Done
Sounds strange. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It is used in sentence below. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In May 2007, Usher split with Patton as his manager." - Needs reference  Done
It is referenced... Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...Usher dismissed these claims on Total Request Live (TRL) in May 2008." - Needs reference  Done
It is referenced... Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Usher's father, Usher Raymond III, died in January 2008." - Needs reference  Done
It is referenced... Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In March 2007..." - Add comma at end  Done
Sounds strange. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It is used in "In May 2007, Usher split with Pattan as his manager." - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...although neither was included on the album." - Change "was" to "were"  Done
No, "neither" refers to singular objects. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Composition
  • "...between two consenting adults" - Sentence should end there  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • It seems confusing to read at times with many different elements in the section  Done
I don't understand. Can you clarify what you mean? Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
At first, it seemed a little cluttered, but I now see it is necessary for the article. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Release and promotion
  • All release dates should stay in "Release history" section  Done
The prose should at least touch on the release time. Omitting this info would be like removing chart peaks since there is a table of them. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...at Radio 1's Big Weekend, 2008..." - Make it "in 2008"  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...and on May 30, 2008 he performed on Good Morning America." - Should be standalone sentence  Done
Why? That would create two stubby sentences. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In June he performed the single..." - Specify year; specify what single he performed  Done
Oops, done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Usher sang "Love in This Club" with Young Jeezy at reality television show The Hills'third season finale on May 12..." - Change "at" to "on"; space between "Hills'" and "third"; specify year  Done
  • Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...and again, by himself, at the finale of the sixth season of Dancing with the Stars on May 20..." - Should be standalone sentence; specify year  Done
That creates two awkward stop-and-start sentences. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...and at the opening of the 2008 BET Awards on June 23, 2008." - Should be standalone sentence  Done
That creates two/three awkward stop-and-start sentences. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It would make "and" appear two times in the sentence. It needs some seperation. Otherwise it sounds like "This and this and this" - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Usher performed "Love in This Club" and "This Ain't Sex" on..." - Start sentence with something besides Usher to avoid repetition  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Usher performed a one-off showcase concert for 1,500 fans at indigO2, London on May 22, 2008. Tickets were allocated by ballot." - Combine sentences  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "On September 4, 2008..." - Add comma at end  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Singles

  • "It featured on multiple singles..." - "It appeared on..."  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...and was certified gold by the Recording Industry Association of New Zealand." - Specify certification date  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...it impacted radio on August 18." - Specify year  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...and reached number forty-five on the Hot 100 and number four on the Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs." - Make standalone sentence  Done
Why? Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Nevermind. I see why it would be awkward as a standalone sentence. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Tour

  • "...coining the trip One Night Stand: Ladies Only Tour." - Needs reference  Done
It is referenced... Not every single sentence needs to end with a citation. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...the tour commenced on November 2, 2008 and concluded twenty-three days later." - Specify what date it concluded  Done
  • "The tour's female-focussed concept..." - Fix spelling  Done
Oops, I need to rememeber to check for American and British spelling differences. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Setlist

  • Because this is not a tour article, I would put the setlist in a readable prose  Done
Why? The order of songs should be a list, IMO. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It just seemed sort of awkward as a standalone list. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Try to expand this section more  Done
How? Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Mistake on my part here. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Dates and venues

  • Need references  Done
Referenced in the main tour prose section
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

  • No issues  Done
Reception
  • "He called Here I Stand"as good - if not better" than Confessions." - Space between "Stand" and "as"  Done
There is a space. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
When I first looked at it, it appeared as if there wasn't one. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...sold an unweighted 267,000." - Specify number with "units"  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In mainland Europe..." - Add comma at end  Done
Why? Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It is basic punctuation. When you read it, there is a pause between that phrase and "the album was received well". - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...and received a platinum award from the International Federation of the Phonographic Industry (IFPI)." - Make standalone sentence  Done
Why? Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It initially appeared as a long sentence. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Aftermath
  • "...Here I Stand had sold two million copies worldwide compared to Confessions' nineteen million copies..." - Needs citation  Done
There is a citation. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...and deflected comments that was responsible for the lower album sales." - Change "was" to "were"  Done
Oops, missing word ("he"). Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Try and find another name for the section to fit it better  Done
Yes, I had thought about that, but couldn't find a better one. I pondered "Impact", although the marriage break-up isn't really a result of the album. DO you have any suggestions? Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe try "Social and economic effect" or "Social and economic impact". - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Track listing
  • Add references  Done
Why? Most tracklistings do not have references because they are found in various sources discussing the album. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I see the credits now come from the "Personnel" section. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Amazon.com Bonus and US iTunes Store Bonus start tracks at number 21  Done
Fixed the Amazon.com one, but the iTunes one is correct as the worldwide deluxe edition tracks are also included. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Personnel
  • No issues  Done
Charts
  • No issues  Done
Release history
  • Include "Format" and "Label" columns; you can also add "Edition(s)" album if necessary  Done
I don't believe it is possible to track down the various formats in every country and verify them with reliable sources. The label is noted in the "Release and promotion" prose section. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
References
  • Reference 2 - Publisher needs to be wiki-linked  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Reference 4 - Publisher needs to be wiki-linked  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It says at the bottom of the website that the copyrights go to MTV Networks. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Reference 29 - Work and publisher need to be wiki-linked  Done
Done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Until December 2009 Billboard was published by Nielsen Business Media
Noted. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Number one information should be in "Charts" section  Done
Ew. No. Per WP:FOOTER navigational boxes should be at the bottom of the article. I fix any articles that contain a separate section for them, and encourage you to do the same. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I was not aware of this rule. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
OVERALL REVIEW

After reviewing this article thoroughly, I have decided to put the article on hold at this time. There are numerous issues that are affecting this article from reaching GA status. Here are the main issues:

  • Prose quality: The prose of this article needs some work. As you can see, there are numerous grammar and punctuation issues among others.
  • References to sources: There are a lot of spots where specific facts aren't supported by cited references.

Other issues have been listed above. I will give you the general seven days to fix these mistakes and/or debate the ones you believe do not affect good article status. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 23:58, 14 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review. I believe I have addressed all the issues you have raised. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I went through all of the comments I left, and put the {{done}} template around the items that have been fixed. I also put the {{notdone}} template on issues that I believe still need to be addressed according to GA criteria. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 07:13, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. Everything has been done now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:03, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Since all of the issues have been addressed, I now feel confident to pass this article. Congratulations and keep up the good work. - Rp0211 (talk2me) 16:03, 15 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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