Talk:Hensley & Co./GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gatoclass (talk) 16:36, 1 May 2011 (UTC)

Actually, I changed my mind, I think I will review this - it shouldn't take too long. Gatoclass (talk) 16:36, 1 May 2011 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   A few issues here:

   "Hensley accepted an offer later that year". Later what year?

   "While it initially handled many brands of beer, Hensley accepted an offer later that year[1] to become Anheuser-Busch's exclusive distributor for Maricopa County". Does this mean Hensley only sold Anheuser-Busch brands, or that Hensley was the only distributor to sell A-B's product in Mariposa?

   "from 2001 to 2006, the company and its employees would contribute an additional $24,000 to such campaigns". Does "such campaigns" mean McCain's campaigns, or political campaigns in general? (If the former, I would suggest simply dropping the "to such campaigns" phrase).

   "with company executives contributing heavily to it[17] and company spokesperson Douglas Yonko the association's Arizona director". Sentence makes no sense to me, can you clarify it somehow please?

   "not to impose alcohol content display requirement for beer labels". I think I know what this means, but the sentence doesn't make much sense and seems to be ungrammatical. Why not just something like "not to require alcohol content displays for beer labels"?

   All issues now resolved. Gatoclass (talk) 02:17, 21 May 2011 (UTC)

1. B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

   Seems to have a nice balance between the company's self-interested actions and its community initiatives.

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   Has a logo. Gatoclass (talk) 16:45, 1 May 2011 (UTC)

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   I guess it could have an image of Cindy McCain, or perhaps a crate of beer or something.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   A well written and informative article which strikes a nice balance between the company's history and its political and community activities. Gatoclass (talk) 02:17, 21 May 2011 (UTC)

Units

• It refers to "case" of beer in three places. It would be helpful to the reader to provide volume units.

Lightmouse (talk) 18:45, 9 May 2011 (UTC)

Thanks again for the review. I've made changes to address all these points, including the one Lightmouse added. Wasted Time R (talk) 12:14, 20 May 2011 (UTC)