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Reviewer: ProKro (talk · contribs) 16:19, 22 July 2015 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- "There he captained..." – "There, he captained..." (Comma)
- Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)
- "The following day he was killed in action." – "He was killed in action the following day." (Either work; more common wording)
- I prefer to keep as it is, if that's ok. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)
- Sure thing. ProKro (talk) 00:17, 28 July 2015 (UTC)
Rugby career
[edit]- "In 1908 he was a member..." – "In 1908, he was a member..." (Comma)
1913 Season
[edit]- "On 6 September 1913..." – On 6 September 1913,... (Comma)
Military career
[edit]- "24 hours later on 9 August 1915,..." – "Twenty-four hours later on 9 August 1915,..." (While not strictly incorrect, majority of Stylebooks and Manuals of Style recommend starting a sentence with a number written out rather than in its the numerical form; in this case 24.)
- Absolutely. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)
Review
[edit]Article is concise and focused with only a few minor spelling and/or syntactic errors. Text is easy to read, it is interesting and engaging.
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- References are few but reliable and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Neutral
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- There are no copyvios or other issues.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Additional comments
[edit]- While not as prominent as in the Albert Downing and Arthur James Dingle articles, there are some chiefly British/New Zealand English spelling preferences, so I'd suggest putting the New Zealand English tag in the article's talk page.
- Tagged British. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)
- Same as with the other articles, I'd suggest changing the date format.
- I prefer to keep British English date format for consistency, if that's ok. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)
- Noted. Discuss over at Albert Downing/GA1. ProKro (talk) 00:17, 28 July 2015 (UTC)
Just as with Albert Downing, it's an easy pass. As soon as the issues are addressed, the article'll be good-to-go. If you have any questions, feel free to ask. ProKro (talk) 22:16, 25 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for all three of these! FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)
- Sure thing and congratulations! Pass ProKro (talk) 00:17, 28 July 2015 (UTC)