Talk:Henry B. Payne/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 18:49, 23 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this shortly. Wizardman 18:49, 23 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Here's what I found:

Given the article's size, it could probably stand to have a longer lead.
"They would have six children" They had six children - the former sounds a bit too passive for me.
" but after suffering from attacks of hemoptysis (bleeding in the lungs,) he" the comma should be outside the parenthesis
In the refs, for the congressional bios you have Bolton in app caps once but not the other time; keep consistent.

Overall not much to fix. I'll put the article on hold and will pass when fixed. As an aside, I didn't see any spots that felt light, but I do have access to the Plain Dealer archives if there's any spots that you'd like to expand a bit. Wizardman 20:45, 23 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Wizardman: I think I've cleared up all of the issues you raised. Thanks for the review! --Coemgenus (talk) 15:51, 24 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. I'll do a skim of the archives just to make sure there's nothing missed of note; if there isn't then I'll pass it tomorrow. Wizardman 02:58, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I'd be glad to add more if anything turns up. --Coemgenus (talk) 10:46, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Didn't find anything of note, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman 21:34, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]