Talk:Henri-Thomas Lokondo/GA1

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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 00:50, 22 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

The primary thing here is lead expansion. More should be mentioned upfront about his dissent and other parliamentary activities.

Added "In the 2000s he formed his own party, the Union Congolaise pour la Liberté. Though officially allied with President Joseph Kabila in Parliament through a coalition, Lokondo has frequently contradicted the bloc's positions in favor of his own party's stances."

"He earned a degree in political science with a focus in international relations from the Université libre de Bruxelles." Poli-sci can be wikilinked

" Lokondo then worked in the Congolese government's intelligence services in Uvira." Is there an article for the Congolese MI6 equivalent?

"Conference Nationale Souveraine" A backdrop for this would be nice

"the Conference Nationale Souveraine—a national convention that discussed democratisation and political reform"

Kinshasa should be wikilinked once as well

"Lokondo went into exile in Belgium though several months later he returned under Laurent-Désiré Kabila's regime..." Comma after Belgium

"On 8 November he vacated his seat in the Assembly." 2004 I assume?

Yes, I figured this didn't need any clarification because of the preceding sentence.

@QatarStarsLeague: I've responded to all comments, and I've added a little contextual information to the article. -Indy beetle (talk) 03:30, 23 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I've reset the review parameter to request a new reviewer, as it appears this review has been abandoned. -Indy beetle (talk) 18:39, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]