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First of all, you did a proper job of correctly utilizing citations and being sure that all of your facts are correctly attributed to a source. Second, as this is an article, you need to make the article much more concise in both paragraphs. It will actually make the article flow better, give readers a better idea of what you are trying to say, and will give you more space to add more facts about the stele. Lastly, add more examples of these stele, as one stele does not give an overall complex look at stele from Demetrias. ScottKilmer2 (talk) 02:17, 6 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Jack -- another good idea for your article would a brief description of Demetrias (where is it?), indication of the dating of the stelai, and a more thorough/nuanced discussion of what a stele is.Jpaga (talk) 13:49, 6 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Sunni's Comment

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Hi Jack, you have a nice start to your article! I do think your introductory paragraph needs a little bit more about the history/context of Demetrias and an overall description of what a stele is. I think you could expand more on each of your paragraphs about the specific stelai you talk about. Keep going, it's looking good! Sunniobrien (talk) 19:45, 14 November 2017 (UTC)Sunni O'Brien[reply]

(More) Comments from Prof. Paga

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Hi Jack - this is a great start! You've got some good feedback already, so here are a few more suggestions.

  • Add a map that indicates where Demetrias is.
  • Add more hyperlinks (like to the Hellenistic period).
  • Consider including another section, perhaps on something like the technique used (not the same as vase painting, not the same as fresco, but something totally different), or a section on why these stelai are special (high survival rate of things like this is rare!), or when/how they were found/excavated.
  • Make sure your images are covered by Wikipedia copyright. Currently, the 2 that you uploaded would not be considered ok. Try using the CCSearch option (in the media/images training module), or include links in your sources to the full images. You could also include comparison images, particularly if you add a section about the technique of the painting. You could compare it to Minoan frescoes, for instance, and include an image of a fresco.

Jpaga (talk) 18:40, 27 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]