Talk:Hedwig Potthast/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 18:10, 15 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:10, 15 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks man. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 15:37, 16 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

No DABs, external links good.
link secondary school, Theissendorf
- Done. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
When was she in Koblenz?
- 1928, I've included it. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Do not need to cite every sentence if using the same source.
- Okay. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Himmler's sponsorship's typo
- Fixed. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
At first they thought about a "decent" way to be together, but it resulted in an adulterous relationship This doesn't make any sense.
- Tweaked. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - Still awkward. Perhaps something like "At first they tried to keep it platonic, but they fell into an adulterous relationship."--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:23, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 20:00, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      - Good enough, although I wouldn't insist on my text.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:22, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Margarete Himmler whom he had married in 1928 and a year later had a daughter rephrase
- I don't understand this?
  - This is awkward; rephrase it or add some punctuation to set off the subordinate clauses.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:19, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 20:00, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      - Good enough.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:22, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Himmler's mistress awkward, use her name instead.
- Done.
Berchtesgaden isn't near Munich, but it is in Bavaria.
- Tweaked. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Sanatorium of Hohenlychen what does this mean?
- Tweaked and linked. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - Better; is there a link for Hohenlychen?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:23, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    - Don't forget this.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:22, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      - I don't think there is: Hohenlychen Sanatorium Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 12:13, 21 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
        Oh... there is. I've added it. :) Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 12:15, 21 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
--they met Replace the double hyphen with an emdash.
- Done. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Potthast refused.[7] Potthast Use a pronoun for the second use.
- I agree, done. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
in 1997 aged 85 in add commas.
- Done.
What makes her notable? She's mentioned frequently by Longerich, but so what.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:26, 18 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Well, I'd say with all this info being available, yea, she's okay notable for an article. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 14:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- ~~I'll be home from "work" in a few minutes, I'll look into your comment then. Jonas Vinther • (Click here to collect your price!) 11:07, 19 October 2015 (UTC)~~[reply]