Talk:Heather Knight (educator)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Moray An Par (talk) 04:36, 9 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Lead is short. Consider expanding and give intro on her educational philosophies.

"Dr Knight asserts that" – remove Dr. Per WP:HONORIFIC, this should be avoided, and subsequent mention of her name must refer to her simply as Knight.

Pacific Union College Church is redlinked. Is it notable?

"currently" in the first sentence is redundant. The sentence uses "is" so we'd expect, as it should be, that anything stated is current.

I don't know if this is in the guidelines, but I'd prefer if there's no "office created" in the infobox and simply state that she's the "1st Provost of Andrews University".

Link Jamaica.

"colloquy or assembly" – choose one

"Adventist College" doesn't refer to a name of a specific college. Therefore, don't capitalize college.

How was she "responsible for over 150 academic programs, 227 full-time faculty, 3,400 students studying on the Berrien Springs campus, as well as another 4,000 students studying in Affiliation and Extension programs around the world, and a $75 million budget." Consider rewording to something like, "Over 150 programs ... was introduced during her term."
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
What about her family background? Is she born to a poor family? Is her family also in the academe.

I'm not sure if "Affirmation of Commitment to Faith and Reason" belongs to her career. What about including it in her educational philosophy as a section.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It'll be more preferable if opinions (support and criticism) of other educators/politicians/etc on her educational philosophies would be included.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
None.
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Is this her only free picture? Have you searched Flickr for free files and asked uploaders to release them in a CC license? It'll be better if you can include one more, like Knight on her inaugural speech as president or Knight in her childhood.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

YAY! Finally a reviewer! Thanks, Moray!

Will attempt to expand lead. Like I've said on previous good article nominations, this is the hardest part of article writing for me, so if an onlooker is willing to do it, I would be very appreciative.
Done, sorry, must have missed it earlier when I removed those.
Yes, that article is currently being worked on at WP:SDA/PUCChurch.
Changed to say "who is serving as..."
Done.
assembly removed.
I clarified it, she oversaw it. She didn't start it.
I searched quite extensively, I haven't found much information about her family background.
Agreed, moved.
The image of her was provided by her upon request since we could find no other images. She may be willing to provide another image. Is that enough to hold up a GA review? I note that Larry Geraty passed with no images. bW 06:56, 9 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

You're welcome. Not having her family background and photos cannot hold its promotion. They make the article more interesting though. I'll post here my other concerns later when I get the time to review the references. Moray An Par (talk) 09:40, 9 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Some more concerns

It'll be better if you can tell where are Oakwood University, Loma Linda University, Stanford University and Harvard University located.
The Spectrum Magazine citation on her installment doesn't mention any info on the attendance. "in a well-attended ceremony" may be ambiguous and speculative.
On citation, include location info on print publications unless the location is part of the name.
Ref 1 doesn't have info on publisher and accessdate.
Which reference mentions that she's the first black woman president of the university?

Moray An Par (talk) 11:09, 9 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Done.
Removed and additional source included. I think that is in a source somewhere but I don't want to look for it and it's unnecessary.
Which ones specifically? Some of them don't necessarially publish from anywhere (ie., Spectrum, I'm sure they have an address but they're people don't work in one main office)
Added.
The 11th one, Taking the Helm at PUC.

Thanks again! bW 04:02, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Minor concerns

Ref 10 is a dead link.
Remove Facebook link.
January 14, 2010, Dr. Norman Knight, Vespers, (mp3) link is dead.

Moray An Par (talk) 14:09, 9 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

No its not..
Where is the facebook link? Unless you're referring to the video? I understand that we don't link to their pages but is there a policy/guideline against utilizing resources from official facebook pages?
Removed.

Thanks again! bW 04:07, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

That's weird. It was dead when I last checked it. Well never mind.
Websites that require registration to view content are very much discouraged (although we can both agree that many of us do have Facebook profiles) per WP:ELREG. It's a CNN broadcast uploaded by the College's FB page, and may be a copyright violation (since it's not theirs, and you must only upload what is yours). This is covered by WP:YT. Try finding a better link that doesn't require a log-in, and was uploaded by CNN. Try the CNN website or CNN's YouTube channel.
So the source says that Knight is the first black president of PUC. How about this claim that she is "the only African-American woman to lead an Adventist college in the North America"?
Is "Affirmation of Commitment to Faith and Reason" a proper name? A name of a position paper? College memorandum? If not, decapitalize (sorry for the neologism) succeeding words. Also, a reword to something more concise would be nice.
Was she involved in politics? Did she endorse any candidate? Is she a vocal supporter of any cause/bill? Moray An Par (talk) 05:45, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Facebook Video can be viewed without registration. I looked already, there is no other version online that I could find.
The citation when it appears in the article has both. [1]
Will change it, someone else titled it.
Not that I know of... Just a plain academic, with really awesome hair, I might add. ;)

bW 05:55, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Oh I see. But what about its copyright status? Well then, the only thing remaining now is that and the lead. Moray An Par (talk) 06:04, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Closing

It's been almost a month since BelloWello's last activity. Although I still strongly believe that it should bear a longer lead, the article contributor has addressed the concerns for this GA. Moray An Par (talk) 03:52, 25 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]