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GA Review

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Reviewer: CrowzRSA 23:53, 3 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (No OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Comments:

  • "Cobain forgot about the song for a while, but began working on it again when he and his wife Courtney Love moved to a house in the Hollywood Hills" (Origin and recording), really doesn't sound correct.
  • Well if it said something like "The song was written by Cobain, but was forgotten. Later he and his wife Courtney Love moved to a house in the Hollywood Hills, where they began working on the song again." CrowzRSA 22:13, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Rereading the sentence in conjuction with the one preceeding it, the meaning seems pretty clear. WesleyDodds (talk) 13:21, 7 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Track listing," probably would look better and more organized if you followed this guide.
    The tracklist template is optional and is only recommended for complicated tracklists. I personally have always found it to be unnecessarily complex. WesleyDodds (talk) 04:49, 4 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • ISBN 0-8264-1776-3 Parameter error in {{ISBN}}: checksum isn't valid.
Specific Comments
Lead


Origin and recording
  • Perhaps add <ref name="Azerrad, p. 325"> to somewhere else in the 5th paragraph (This would just make the paragraph look more reliable to readers)
  • (Par 3) Add link to demo (demo → [[Demo (music)|demo]]
  • (Par 3) Add link to vocals (vocals → [[Singing|vocals]]
  • (Par 3) Add link to bass (bass → [[Bass Guitar|bass]]
  • (Par 3) Add link to guitar solo (guitar solo → [[guitar solo]]) (mabye)
I linked "demo" but not the others because they are common terms that don't require Wikilinks. I see nothing wrong with the placement of the citation. WesleyDodds (talk) 02:31, 9 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Composition and lyrics
  • (Par 2) "the song actually appeared to be about Courtney Love." add in "to be about his wife, Courtney Love."
  • (Par 2) Add link to Charles Cross (Charles Cross → Charles Cross)
  • (Par 2) "Hey/Wait/I've," mabye these should appear "Hey/ Wait/ I've" or something. I'm not sure about this.
  • (Par 2) Is "perceived by the media."a quote from the reference, because if it is it should be in quotes...
Release
  • Is the whole first half of the paragraph all mentioned in "Nirvana Set has Smell of Success"?
  • "in early September 1993." maybe there should be an "of" between September and 1993.
  • Add link to Billboard (I see it in the lead, but Modern Rock Tracks is too and it has a link.
  • Maybe add how long the album was on the chart somewhere in the paragraph.
  • "A single of the song was released" doesn't sound right at all. Change it to something like "The song was released as a single in the..."
March 13th comments

These comments regard coverage of what I haven't given comments on. After these are responded to, it may be GA. I will finalize after all comments are resolved

  • The In Utero extra track list in the infobox should be "studio," not "single"
  • The lead doesn't say anything about the music video, other than it's director's name and about it's reception.
  • "...received much American radio airplay.." mabye this would sound better "...received adequate airplay in the US..."
  • Chart DOES meet WP:CHARTS
  • The cover art has a white gash in the bottom left corner, that should be fixed (here is the complete image [1] (image resolution is currently good though)
  • I know nothing about handling images on Wikipedia, so I have no idea how to upload a new version. Personally, the mark is almost unnoticeable to me, and didn't see it until you pointed it out.

WesleyDodds (talk) 11:15, 14 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • The In Utero page says the songs length is 4:41, this says 4:39, they should probably be identicle.
  • Yeah It does say 4:39
  • Mabye this should be in the external links

Great job on the article, especially with finding references for everything. CrowzRSA 21:12, 18 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]