Talk:Hawaii–Tahiti relations/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 00:52, 21 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

1. Prose On hold

2. Verifiability On hold

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations On hold

7. Miscellaneous On hold

1.

"According to oral traditions the second migration of Polynesians" - Comma after traditions
"Kamehameha I " is a duplink
" Queen Pōmare denied such" - Which Queen Pōmare?
Is there a reason the transcript of the letter to Kamehameha has two citations? Is there a difference in text between versions?
"and didn't have" - Spell out contractions unless in direct quotes
"had a brief correspondent with" - Should this be correspondence, not correspondent?

2.

"Hawaii escaped French annexation because the balance of American, British, and French interests in the islands made it impossible for any of the three nations to annex the islands." - Citation needed
"The Hawaiian journal of history: Volume 25" - Do we have any more information for this reference? Article title, date, author, publisher, etc.? Additionally, I think the journal name should be in title case.

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Disclaimer: This may be a template-caused issue. If so, I don't expect this to be fixed, given that the template is probably the best available. While Hawaii and the label are in green, Tahiti and the label are in different colors. I'm not sure if this is actually fixable or not.
"Photograph of young Tahitian-Hawaiian boy and girl, 1909" - Maybe make this caption "Photographs of young Tahitian-Hawaiian boy and girl, 1909", since it's two photographs.

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Lead needs a few more sentences, it's a little short given the length of the article

I am going to withdraw this nomination. There is a lot of issues with it that I am seeing right now. KAVEBEAR (talk) 03:44, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]