Talk:Hasdrubal, son of Hanno/GA1
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 01:21, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
- Link city state in the lead?
- Done.
- Probably needs a hatnote to Hasdrubal. None of the others are known as the "son of Hanno", but since there's so many with this name, the hatnote would probably be helpful.
- You have gone technical here. I am but an ignorant content creator and do not always understand terminology.
- " the Romans turned to fight - Optional - I know we have different ideas about MOS EGG, so this one's optional. I'm just thinking maybe this whole phrase should be linked, although that's mostly because when I saw "turned to flight" linked, I assumed the link was to rout. I can see either side of this one, so I guess I'm just really thinking out loud here
- Done.
- "and were joined by third general, Hamilcar," - by a third general
- Done.
Through Battle of Tunis, I'll finish this off later. Hog Farm Bacon 01:54, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
- "Henceforth the Carthaginian approach was purely defensive,[91] The war ended nine years later in 241 BC with a Roman victory" - I'm assuming that the comma is supposed to be a full stop.
- Aging eyesight. Fixed.
- Refs in alphabetical order: you go Tipps, Walbank, Tipps, Walbank
- The alphabet doesn't work like that where you live? Fixed.
- Google is misspelled in the Warmington ref
- All Google links removed.
The references all look reliable, and the image licensing looks acceptable. Placing on hold. Hog Farm Bacon 18:45, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
- Hi Hog Farm, swift work, thank you. Your comments all addressed above. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:42, 30 August 2020 (UTC)