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Reviewer: Gerald Waldo Luis (talk · contribs) 01:45, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
Hi there! Will be reviewing this article. Looks pretty neat at first glance, expect a full review in several hours. GeraldWL 01:45, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
Lead and infobox
[edit]- There's no need for reference 2, as Servais' position as writer-director has been cited in the body, and leads shouldn't have citations whenever possible.
- Link short film
- Other than that, everything here looks good.
Plot, themes
[edit]- "...finds a man strangling a woman in a fountain." Previously there's already "the cries of a woman" and there's only one woman in this film, so it should be "the woman in a fountain."
- Linking chips is WP:OVERLINK.
- "Servais' 1968 film Siren" --> "Servais' Siren (1968)".
Production
[edit]- "He made his first animated short film in 1959"-- link animation and short film.
- "He envisioned it as a comedy horror film"-- link comedy horror.
- It was linked above as "horror parody", but this looks better.
- "...about a harpy, a winged, female monster from Greek mythology." I don't think we need this definition of harpy here since it's already stated in the plot section; if you feel like this extension is useful you can put it in the plot, but it shouldn't be here as it's repetition.
- "Harpies are for example known from the Argonautica" --> "Harpies are for example known from the Greek poem Argonautica"
- "...traditional cartoon"-- link Traditional animation.
- "the spontaneous to visuals close to interwar"-- is this referring to Interwar period? Or other stuff?
- Yes, I reworded it and added a link.
- Link frames per second.
Release
[edit]- Above at the infobox there's ref 1 for the 9 minutes claim. To make the lead citation-free, I'd suggest modifying the second sentence to "With a running time of nine minutes,[1] it was the third time one of Servais' short films was selected for the festival; he had previously participated with Goldframe in 1969 and Operation X-70 in 1972.[27]"
Reception
[edit]- "...and Wim de Poorter of Ons Erfdeel"-- remove "Wim de" and "of Ons Erfdeel" as it has been established in Production who Poorter is and where he worked for.
- Link Phantasmagoria.
- "...the director's most individual film"-- you mean individualist? Or...? Because individual means "single; separate" nnd "of or for a particular person"
- Changed to "unique", which is the word used in the source.
- "1979 Annecy festival --> "1979 Annecy International Animation Film Festival".
Legacy
[edit]- Link film school
- Other than that, looks all good!
- Thank you very much, Gerald Waldo Luis! I think I have addressed everything above. Let me know if anything else is needed. Ffranc (talk) 10:24, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
- Ffranc: awesome! One last thing to note, at the sources section, I'd suggest linking CRC Press and Les 400 coups, as well as the locations in the =location parameters. All while I review MOS to make sure I'm not missing anything. GeraldWL 12:26, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
- Linked everything I could in the source section now. Ffranc (talk) 12:42, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
- And that wraps the GAN for this article! Probably one of the fastest (but still thorough) GANs I've reviewed. It's comprehensive, written well article for a masterpiece. Passed GeraldWL 13:59, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
- Thank you for the fast review! Ffranc (talk) 14:23, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
- And that wraps the GAN for this article! Probably one of the fastest (but still thorough) GANs I've reviewed. It's comprehensive, written well article for a masterpiece. Passed GeraldWL 13:59, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
- Linked everything I could in the source section now. Ffranc (talk) 12:42, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
- Ffranc: awesome! One last thing to note, at the sources section, I'd suggest linking CRC Press and Les 400 coups, as well as the locations in the =location parameters. All while I review MOS to make sure I'm not missing anything. GeraldWL 12:26, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
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