Talk:Harpalus

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I've removed the following sentence: "He was a student of Aristotle and a close friend of Alexander the Great since childhood." What is the source for this information? Paul August ☎ June 30, 2005 19:33 (UTC)

The first paragraph does not give any references to sources. Macedon at this age was divided into various districts, what district did Harpalus come from? Harpalus was made royal treasurer and resided in Babylon, that is clearly not "a post in Asia Minor". --Bvoppen 19:34, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

In the second paragraph "charming rogue" is not an objective description. I would have expected an illustration of such "charming" behavior, such as proclaiming his mistresses as "queen". --Bvoppen 19:34, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The chronology of Harpalus' flight from Babylon is not secure. Shouldn't that be made more explicit? --Bvoppen 19:34, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Farther down that same paragraph, several Greek terms appear that could easily be translated: use "assembly" instead of "ecclesia"; use "council of ex-magistrates", or "senate" if you will, instead of "Areopagus"; use "supreme court" instead of "Heliaia"? (At least link the word ecclesia; and all terms require a definite article.) --Bvoppen 19:34, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

There are several ungrammatical or overly complex sentences in this paragraph as well. For instance: "Ecclesia after a proposal of Demosthenes decided the guarding of Harpalus' money, which were entrusted to a committee led by Demosthenes himself". Instead: "After a proposal of Demosthenes, the assembly decided to entrust Harpalus' money to a committee led by Demosthenes himself." --Bvoppen 19:34, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Since it has not been explained that Demosthenes was an orator, how can the reader be expected to know that in the following sentences "orator and "Demosthenes" are the same person? "When Harpalus escaped and fled to Crete, the orator faced a new wave of public uproar. Areopagus conducted an inquiry and its findings charged Demosthenes with mishandling 20 talents." --Bvoppen 19:34, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

What is the relevance of the last paragraph? Is that the equivalent of "Harpalus in Popular Culture?" --Bvoppen 19:34, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]