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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 04:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]


I will be picking up the review of this one - both for the Wiki Cup and the GA cup as well. I will be making my review comments over the next couple of days.

Side note, I would love some input on a Featured List candidate (Mexican National Light Heavyweight Championship) and a Featured Article candidate (CMLL World Heavyweight Championship). I am not asking for Quid pro Quo, but all help is appreciated.  MPJ-US  04:36, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • First comment - the layout gets in the way of the readability in a way, three quote blocks, at one point they are squeezing the text between them and at one place it's squished between the quote and the info box. If I was not reviewing it I'd probably move on once I saw the layout.

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I like to get this checked out first, I have found issues using this that has led to quick fails so it's important this passes muster.

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  • WP:LEAD is too short - should have 1-2 paragraphs; since this is supposed to be a Good Article I would like to see it have 2 paragraphs
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  • "where they were beaten twice by the local side."
  • "commute from Berri where he eventually settled on his own block as a fruit grower"
  • Those two should be rewritten to avoid any copyright issues.
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  • no issues Green tickY
External links
  • No issues Green tickY

Well Written

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  • I would recommend the "convert" template for all measurements that are currently in metric only.
  • "During this time he" needs a comma after "time"
  • I would imagine "riverland" is a place name? probably should be capitalized then.
  • "beaten twice by the local side.", a bit informal how about "lost twice to the home team"?
  • "Players in the 1911 South Australian" should be "Players onin the 1911 South Australian"
  • The term "VFL" needs to be spelled out the first it is used.
  • "at Adelaide Oval" should be "at the Adelaide Oval"?
  • "Port Adelaide victors" should be either "Port Adelaide being victorious" or "Port Adelaide coming out as the victors"
  • "Mr Swain" should be "Mr. Swain"
  • "settled on his own block as" I am not familar with the term "on his own block", what does that mean?
  • "due to commitments regarding his farm" simplify "due to commitments to his farm"
  • "longserving" should be "long serving"

Sources/verifiable

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  • The following references only have limitd information listed - usually just title and website etc. They need to have all appropriate information added in regards to author, dates, etc.
  • 3
  • 4
  • 5
  • 6
  • 13
  • 16
  • 20
  • 21(really "news"?)
  • Reference 18 seems to be a repeat of #8
  • Some sources use a different date format, some have "January 1, 2012" others have "2012-01-01", pick one and stick with it
  • While the titles may be all caps in the source can we please have them changed in the source?
  • I am not familiar with all the websites, are the following Reliable Sources?
  • oocities.org?
  • users.on.net
  • footybets.com

Broad in coverage

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  • It's 95% football, but for the age he lived it there probably is not a lot of information available for that time period. So Green tickY

Neutral

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  • Yep Green tickY

Stable

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  • its very much a one man article but I see no signs of edit warring or issues Green tickY

Illustrated / Images

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  • File:PortAdelaide1914.jpg needs a US public domain tag
  • File:Harold Oliver Port Adelaide.jpg = has a "non-free" tag, with all the other pictures of Oliver I don't think the "non-free" use is appropriate. Is it old enough to not actually be copyrighted any more?
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