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Education

I am going to rephrase this sentence:

Harold went to Mintholme College, Southport, a preparatory school and then on to a private education made possible by his father`s change in fortune.

by moving the reference to the change in parental fortune and affordability of private education to a sentence before "Harold went.." The preparatory school and the 'public school' he both attended were in the private education system and not the (new) English state education system.Cloptonson (talk) 14:02, 22 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Redundant sentence removed

I have removed this from end of the article on grounds that it is of now (2014) of no informative purpose:

The Imperial War Museum is presently undergoing renovation and the gallery will once again be open to the public in July 2013.

Cloptonson (talk) 14:23, 22 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]