Talk:Happenings Ten Years Time Ago/GA1
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Reviewer: Tkbrett (talk · contribs) 12:44, 7 November 2022 (UTC)
Review to come shortly. Tkbrett (✉) 12:44, 7 November 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking this on. I've used quote boxes in several GAs, but this was the first time someone pointed out that quote marks aren't needed. I suppose I have to make some changes. —Ojorojo (talk) 14:43, 7 November 2022 (UTC)
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- Do you have Christpher Hjort's book Strange Brew: Eric Clapton & the British Blues Boom 1965–1970? I wonder if it would have any info on this song's recording date, though maybe not since it was after Clapton left the group.
- I looked through it a couple of times a while back and felt it was more of a generalist overview without any information that I didn't already have access to elsewhere. There's no google preview available to me now, but I doubt if it has any better details.
- Gotcha. I don't have access to it and probably won't buy it since it's not really relevant to the things I edit, but I figured I'd make sure you were at least aware of it.
- The article uses British English everywhere except for one spot: in the lead, "lineup" (American spelling) rather than "line-up" (British). You probably also ought to add a Brit English tag to clarify.
- Fixed & added temp. (typo actually, "line up" is American). How's your Cockney? I've never been able to hear what Beck is saying except "why you gotta wear ya long hair?" (he begins at 1:49 on this video[1])
- Ah, that's funny, I didn't realize there was a noun-verb distinction for lineup/line up. The script I have on here for auto editing a page to a certain language style just changes everything to "lineup" for American English.
- I have no idea how the various authors can hear anything. All I hear is "Why you all wear your long hair?" and maybe "crumpet".
- In note [a], the last bit confused me. In particular: ... and in another interview, he "confirmed that Relf wrote its lyrics about reincarnation during an acid trip". Introducing the quotation with "in another interview" made me expect that you were going to directly quote McCarty, but the wording of the quotation makes me think you're actually quoting biographer Greg Russo. If you're quoting Russo, you should paraphrase the quotation or make it clear you're not quoting McCarty.
- Agree, clarified.
- ... writes group chronicler Greg Russo. Having Russo's name at the end of such a long quotation made me wonder whose words I was reading. I think the attribution should appear upfront.
- Agree, broke up and reworded.
- Citation needed: In Vancouver, Canada, it reached No. 8 on CKLG's "Boss 40".
- Removed. I was hoping to find a RS for this.[2] In McGinnis' "References", he links to another website that has reproduced weekly charts (not actual scanned images). No big deal, maybe add him as an external link?
- Sure, I don't think the external links criteria apply to GAs anyway.
- Not an issue for the GA criteria but if you were going to nominate this for featured status, I'd recommend paraphrasing much of the retrospective assessment section as it's a bit quote-heavy. A good guide is WP:RECEPTION.
- It's a bad habit I picked up early on in dealing with a very prolific Led Zeppelin sockpuppet, who reverted everything that wasn't a direct quote. I'll try to incorporate some of the linked suggestions.
- Copyvio only highlights quotations, indicating no copyright issues.
Great read. Nice work. I see you've already noticed the edits I made as I went through – if you have no issues with those, then the above comments are all I have to remark upon. Tkbrett (✉) 21:33, 7 November 2022 (UTC)
- I think I've addressed your issues. Thanks again. —Ojorojo (talk) 16:13, 8 November 2022 (UTC)
- All looks good. ✓ Pass Tkbrett (✉) 21:36, 8 November 2022 (UTC)