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Reviewer: Handschuh-talk to me 09:03, 14 November 2010 (UTC)
This is my first attempt at an Good Article review so here goes;
- The sub heading Legal aspects/Situation in Germany deviates from manual of style with respect to references and wording (e.g. "As an example for a european country...", reference to DEVA website, etc.) This section also has spelling/grammar issues (e.g. capital 'E' for European, etc.) German terms with their English translations are formatted inconsistently (e.g. "Beduerfnispruefung" in both brackets and quotes next to it's English translation but "Deutsche Versuchs- und Prüfanstalt für Jagd- und Sportwaffen (DEVA)" in quotes next to its English translation in brackets.
- Personal pronouns are still being used (e.g. "he can apply for a permit...")
- The subheading Bullets/Purchased Bullets still has no references.
- Overall, article still reads like a manual in heading/subheading structure, especially the subheadings Materials Required, Reloading Process and Accuracy Tips.
Placing a hold on this one pending a response to the above issues. Handschuh-talk to me 09:03, 14 November 2010 (UTC)
- At first glance there seems to be a few errors that need fixing and a few additions that that need to be included. I am working on an article at present and will read through and make some suggestions. DeusImperator (talk) 23:05, 3 December 2010 (UTC)
What's the status on this GA review? There haven't been any updates in a month. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:04, 5 January 2011 (UTC)
The original nominator's concerns still apply to this article, and since both sides seem to have disappeared, I'm going to fail this article as a GA. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:01, 9 January 2011 (UTC)