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Nominator: Pangalau (talk · contribs) 16:03, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Firefangledfeathers (talk · contribs) 16:08, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Thanks for working on this article, Pangalau. First part of the review will be up later today. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 16:08, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review items

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Non-GA-criteria suggestions (optional)

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Items in this section are based on guidelines that are not part of the GA criteria. You are free to work on them or not, and progress won't matter for GA status.

  1. Halimah's DUT honor should be mentioned in the body and infobox, but not the lead sentence, per MOS:POSTNOM. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 18:07, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  2. Some pretty straightforward, uncontroversial facts are supported by inline citations in the lead. It might be better to cite that information in the body and drop the lead citations, per MOS:LEADCITE. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 18:07, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  3. I'd suggest dropping the couple exact dates of term start/end from the lead. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 18:07, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  4. Please review links per MOS:Overlinking. For example, the link to Speaker (politics) could probably be dropped from the lead, since the more Singapore-specific link is present just prior. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 18:07, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  5. I'm speculating here, but it's likely that Halimah's advocacy for women and women's rights is more expansive than her 2019 speech and her criticism of Okletsgo. Please consider expanding that section and rewording the associated lead summary line. I'm seeing some sources mention her advocacy for women prior to her presidency as well. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 18:07, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  6. Please check for duplicate references. The Saad one is duplicated. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 18:07, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Postnominals have been removed from introduction paragraph. Term start/end dates hav been dropped from the introduction paragraph. Reduced linking in the article. Expanded on Halimah's women advocacy and fixed duplicated references. Pangalau (talk) 06:37, 5 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  7. Check for MOS:JOBTITLE capitalization issues. The p should be lowercase in "the eighth President of Singapore". Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:36, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  8. Check for MOS:LQ punctuation issues. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:36, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  9. It might be helpful to note that Tan Cheng Bock, the "former presidential candidate" had been trying to participate in that specific presidential election. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 03:36, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

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Thank you for the quick assessment, @Firefangledfeathers:! I am finally free to focus on this GA nomination. Several points have been addressed, leaving only non-GA criteria suggestions, but I would like to have some feedback prior to editing again. Pangalau (talk) 11:13, 2 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll have more feedback for you soon. Please respond to my comments to indicate which have been addressed. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 14:38, 4 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It would help if you could be more specific in where you put your replies. You can respond to each numbered list item separately, instead of collecting your responses on the bottom. It'll help both me and anyone who wants to evaluate this review in the future. Don't worry about existing comments, but please align your comments moving forward. Firefangledfeathers (talk / contribs) 19:49, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Apologies for the inconvenience. I have reorganised the GA review responses to a more readable state. Pangalau (talk) 03:40, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]