Talk:Hal Hunter (American football, born 1932)/GA1

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 13:15, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"Hunter earned Associated Press Honorable Mention All-American honors his senior season in 1955." Seems to be missing a word; maybe "..honors for his senior season.."? Done
"Hunter was a coach at various high schools and colleges.." Probably worth clarifying he was a football coach. Done
"accumulating a record of 9–30–1." Explain what this notation means, probably using a note. Done

Early history

"He was a three-year heavyweight in wrestling at Canonsburg, recording 18 pins with a total of 33 wins.." This could do with some wikilinks to explain the technical terms. Done

"Hunter also won three letters in track as a sprinter, shot putter, discus thrower and javelin thrower." I don't know if it is an WP:ENGVAR thing, but shot, discus and javelin are considered field events in "track and field" in the UK; is there a better term we can use (maybe athletics) than track? Done

I changed it to "track and field". WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:39, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Coaching career

You use the phrase "He was then.." five times (including one in the lead), which is a bit repetitive. Done

References

Change the details for ref #1 to show |work=Denver Weekly Done
Change the details for ref #2 to show |website=Washington-Greene County Chapter: Pennsylvania Sports Hall of Fame Done
Change the details for ref #3 to show |publisher=Warlick Funeral Home Done
Ref #4 needs to show that it is subscription only, and could do with |via=Newspapers.com Done
Ref #5 needs more details: publisher, year of publication, page number etc. Done
Ref #6, as ref #4. Done
Ref #7 needs a page number. Done
Ref #8 needs a page number. Done

I'm going to stop there with the references. I would suggest you take these points on board, and check the rest yourself. Once you have done them all, I'll take another look over. Done

Overall, this is a pretty good article with just minor quibbles really. The referencing needs a bit of tidying, but nothing more than that. Nice work. Harrias ^talk 13:15, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I think I fixed everything. Thoughts? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:44, 9 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Great work, well done. Harrias ^talk 08:42, 10 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 10:44, 10 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]