Talk:HMS Temeraire (1907)/GA1
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 09:06, 22 February 2017 (UTC)
Could you just check that all relevant points from Talk:HMS Bellerophon (1907)/GA1 have been addressed here? Once that's done, I'll do the review. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:35, 22 February 2017 (UTC)
- Pretty sure that I've gotten all of them. Doesn't mean, of course, that I haven't introduced others, but...--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:36, 22 February 2017 (UTC)
Looks like you got them all.
- link Hebrides
- move link to destroyer to first mention
- I think you should specify the year when giving dates at the beginning of each subsection
- I know that that's sort of a thing on Wiki, but it seems to me to presume that the reader can't track the year if it's provided in the para immediately in front of the new section is kind of insulting.
- I don't think "entering" Constantinople is right. Perhaps arrived off Constantinople?
- Maybe, but arriving off is passive; entered is more active, which seems a better reflection of the Allies taking control, even if they didn't land a whole lot of troops.
That's me done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:30, 23 February 2017 (UTC)
- Thanks for looking this over.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:32, 23 February 2017 (UTC)
This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, and is illustrated by appropriately license images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:39, 23 February 2017 (UTC)