Talk:HMS Saracen (P247)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 00:05, 2 February 2019 (UTC)

I'll do this one. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:05, 2 February 2019 (UTC)

A few comments:

• the surfaced displacement doesn't match between the body and infobox
• third-group or third-batch? Suggest choosing one.
• typo - first was patrol
• say that HMS Talisman was also a sub
• typo - after there days
• between in the Strait of Sicily
• Partinico and Edward Preston Young are duplinked, Preston should just be Preston at second mention
• suggest laterthen eastern Tunisia
• uinto a suitable
• suggest redlinking Corallo
• suggest "south of the island of Capri"?
• Provinçale II and Marseillaise V
• It is a bit of a shock to discover that she wasn't called Saracen until 15 Feb 43. Consider calling her P247 until this point?
  • I don't think so. The 247 pennant was just a temporary number while a name was chosen, and anyway its the same sub. But I've added a sentence to explain this in the first para. L293D (☎ • ✎) 03:12, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
• two German landing crafts
• typo - Saracensighted
• "ending her patrol" needs a full stop
• 1,085
• was not damaged. tThe submarine
• suggest "south of the island of Pianosa"
• "overhead". tThe boat"
• typo - "submarines in he area"
• when landing men is mentioned, it doesn't say they were British agents, but the lead does?
• the table would benefit from a total tonnage sunk at the bottom
• with regard to sources, uboat.net is used extensively, and these entries are apparently based on primary sources. This is a less-than-ideal source, and I don't think it would pass muster at A-Class or FA.
  • I know, and I'm not planning on an ACR or FAC. L293D (☎ • ✎) 03:12, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
• all images are appropriately licensed. A location map wouldn't go astray.
• Earwig indicates some similar phrasing to the uboat.net entry, suggest varying the language to reduce this.
  • Made some changes. Most of the "copyvio" comes from the log book quote about the ship blowing up. I personally like it, as it adds some color and action. L293D (☎ • ✎) 03:12, 2 February 2019 (UTC)

That's me done. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:06, 2 February 2019 (UTC)

All done, except for the displacement, done by Sturm. Sorry for having so many typos, I will be more careful. L293D (☎ • ✎) 03:02, 2 February 2019 (UTC)

This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Nice work! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:54, 2 February 2019 (UTC)