Talk:HMS Renown (1895)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 10:45, 16 June 2012 (UTC)

• "No formal requirement for a second-class battleship suitable for use as the flagship on foreign stations or to hunt dowexisted at the time," -- looks like something got cut off here.
  • Fixed.

• Also, with the above sentence, you never clarify in the design section what exactly makes her suitable as a flagship in foreign stations.
  • My sources don't specify. Presumably because she was considerably larger than most cruisers at the time.

• "In 1903, the crew numbered between 651 and 674 officers and enlisted men." -- The infobox says the regular complement is 674. Why is there a range? Is it because there was a shortage of men?
  • Unknown, sources don't specify, but it might differ if she was a flagship or not.

• "She was considered to handle well and was a good sea-boat." -- considered by whom?
  • Fixed.

• "The barbettes were protected by ten-inch armour plates." -- will need a convert template
  • Indeed.

• " The upper deck casemates were protected by convert|4|in|adj=on|0}} plates"
  • Oops!

• "She was completed in January 1897 at a cost of £751,206" -- Is there a convert template for money? It might be helpful to add what the ship cost in today's pounds, or to show the cost in American dollars, which are the most widely circulated and therefore likely to be familiar to the reader.
  • I no longer make monetary conversions after some prolonged discussions at FAC as these are capital expenditures and not really comparable using inflation calculators which use consumer prices.
• Same for "she was sold for scrap at a price of £39,000."
• Finally, why did she have such a short history as a battleship? I have to imagine it was because she was quickly superseded by more advanced ships.
  • Not really specified by my sources, but she was unsuitable for the battleline because of her weaker main armament.
• Dup link tool shows five duplicate links, all in the "Construction and career" section: Protected cruiser (x2); Prince of Wales; Spithead; King George V.
  • Fixed.
• Parkes ref is unused in the footnotes.
  • Moved to further reading.
• Does FN 15 have a page number?
  • It's a general ref in the notes, so no specific pages. Thanks for the review.

Just a few points. Will come back soon. —Ed!^(talk) 11:19, 16 June 2012 (UTC)

Outstanding. Passing GA. —Ed!^(talk) 18:02, 16 June 2012 (UTC)