Talk:HMS Nemesis (1910)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 20:42, 2 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

I plan to review this article for GA class. I've skimmed it and it looks pretty good. Djmaschek (talk) 20:42, 2 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Review 1

@Simongraham: Please edit the following or argue your case for not fixing. Thanks. Djmaschek (talk) 21:58, 2 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Introduction: "The Acorn class were..." (Recommend: The Acorn class ships were...) Done
- Fixed.
Introduction: "but oil-fired and better armed." (Recommend: but were oil-fired and better armed.) Done
- Added.
Introduction: "and as an escort protecting shipping against submarines deployed at Devonport." (Recommend: Move "deployed at Devonport" after "and". Otherwise, it looks like the subs were deployed at Devonport!) Done
- Moved.
Introduction: "joined the 11th Japanese Destroyer Division" (Suggest: Is there some way you can describe the fact that the ship was loaned to the Japanese and manned by a Japanese crew? I liked the way you described it under the Construction and career section.) Done
- Amended.
Design and development, paragraph 1: "The coal-burning Beagle class were..." (Recommend: The coal-burning Beagle class destroyers were... OR The coal-burning Beagle class was...) Done
- Fixed.
Design and development, paragraph 2: Infobox data matches text data. Done
- Checked.
Construction and career, paragraph 2, sentence 1: "the Flotilla became" (Recommend: the Second Flotilla became). Done
- Added.
Construction and career, paragraph 3: "Karapara escaped to Annaba" (Suggest: "Annaba (Bône)" - I had no idea where Annaba was, but I know that Bône is located in North Africa.) Done
- Added.
Construction and career, paragraph 4: "no longer he need" (Fix: no longer the need) Done
- Fuxed.
References: I do not see a Frievogel citation. (Suggest: If it is relevant, please move to Further reading section. Otherwise remove it.) Done
- Removed.
General: Well-written, verifiable, broad coverage, neutral, stable, illustrated. Done

@Djmaschek: Thank you for your excellent review. I believe that the changes have been made.19:19, 3 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Simongraham: Nice work. GA class. Even though you pinged me, I somehow never got a note, or I overlooked it. Djmaschek (talk) 04:47, 8 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]