Talk:HMS Mosquito (1910)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 22:36, 26 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I will review, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 22:36, 26 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Design and Development

This also reduced costs, : "also" is used later in this sentence, suggest deleting the quoted instance
- Deleted.
The mention of G class at the end of the first paragraph should be hypenated for consistency with the lead
- The format depends on whether it is a noun (no hyphen) or adjective (hyphen).
length, beam and draught dimensions inconsistent with infobox, ditto installed power
- Good spot. Amended.
the text also refers to "three 3 in (76 mm) QF 12-pounder 12 cwt guns" but the "3 in" is missing from the infobox
- Added.

Construction and career

No mention of commissioning although this is stated in the infobox as being in August 1910
- Oops. Amended.
in the Beagle's forming the: this threw me initially, but I think you mean the class of Beagles? Suggest revising this to make it clearer
- Fixed.
Mosquito left Plymouth: no antedence for Plymouth
- Clarified.
Second Division of the Fifth Flotilla and based in Alexandria: "Fifth Destroyer Flotilla"?
- Added.

Bibliography/Source checks

"Volume" is inconsistently presented in the two Corbett refs
- Corrected, along with the publisher name.
There is an errant ampersand in Note 11. Ditto Note 42
- Removed.
Dittmar listed but doesn't seem cited. Same for Moore, Same for Parkes
- Removed Moore and added statements from Dittmar & Colledge and Parkes & Prendergast
The link for Monograph No. 4 doesn't work
- Fixed.
Checking Note 24, this doesn't say that Mosquito was one of the three destroyers sent to the southern end of the Straits of Messina
- Amended to relevant service.
Notes 10, 26 and 27 check out OK

Other stuff

Spotted a few obvious typos as I went along and corrected these, otherwise that's it for me. Zawed (talk) 11:44, 6 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Zawed: Thank you for such an excellent review. I have made the changes. simongraham (talk) 07:58, 9 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This looks all good so am passing as GA as I believe the article meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 03:21, 16 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]