Talk:HMS Llewellyn (1913)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:47, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

I will review, comments to follow in next few days. Zawed (talk) 08:47, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

Infobox

• In the builder field, should recite the name in full. The way it is presented at the moment, it looks like it is part of a location.
  • Done.

Design

• 105 long tons... starting a sentence with a number should be avoided. Zawed (talk) 10:57, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Done.
• 24 hours during testing.?
  • Done.
• Why is quote marks used around pom pom in the infobox but not in the text?
  • Different sources have both, but I have changed the text for consistency.

Construction

• ...the 1912–1913 Programme...: probably need more context for the Programme
  • Done.
• River Clyde mentioned here, but Clydebank in the infobox.
  • Reference to Clydebank removed as unnecessary.
• Originally laid down as Picton, Llewellyn was renamed... since you have already established the original in the previous sentence, perhaps reword. May be: "The ship was renamed Llewellyn by Admiralty order on 30 September 1913,..."
  • Done
• ...the first alphabetical class of the Navy... perhaps a bit more context here? I've read a few RN ship articles but this is the first I've heard of the alphabetical class.
  • Clarified and expanded.
• On the The following day...
  • Done.
• After returning to service,.... This implies she may have been damaged or refitted?
  • Clarified.
• escortinged troop convoys to France
  • Done.
• one of which struck the destroyer. need to mention that the bow was damaged as mentioned in the lead.
  • Done
• without additional casualties. this would imply some casualties due to the torpedo strike?
  • Clarified.

Bibliography

• Monograph No. 35 listed but not cited?
  • Removed.
• Wrong dash style for the pg range in Newbolt.
  • Fixed.

Other stuff

• No dupe links
• Image tags check out OK.

That's my initial pass done. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:57, 19 April 2021 (UTC)

• @Zawed: Thank you for the review. Please check through my changes and tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 14:44, 21 April 2021 (UTC)

• Looks good, I made one small edit. Passing as GA as I consider that this meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:22, 23 April 2021 (UTC)