Talk:HMS Levant (1758)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 15:39, 31 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay.

No DABs and external links look good although the newspaper links are blocked because I don't have access.
Images properly licensed.
First two paras in the lede could be profitably be combined. One sentence paragraphs are not a good way to go.
enemy-controlled vessels reads awkwardly. If they were all French then say so.
Link on first use: launched, Caribbean station, decommissioned, Gibraltar, privateer, shipwright, keel, beam, hold, Dominica, brandy, broken up
forming a battery that could be fired directly forward use the term "chase guns" with a link and rework the sentence appropriately.
enemy craft the leading pair comma after "craft"
Her crewing complement was 200 officers and men Use either crew or complement and use the British term ratings rather than "men".
carry the General aboard Do not capitalize the rank here since it's not a proper noun. And the same here promoted to Admiral in 1794
when in company with Captain Rich's Enterprise she set off the subordinate clause with commas after "when" and "Enterprise"
for breaking up try "to be broken up" instead.

@Sturmvogel 66: No problems re delay, and thanks for the review. The above points are now

Done, and happy to make any further improvements if you come across more. -- Euryalus (talk) 04:40, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]