Talk:HMS Indefatigable (1909)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ✽ Familiae Watt§ ^(TALK) 04:24, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Quick fail criteria assessment

Reviewing the article against the "quick-fail criteria".

1. The article completely lacks reliable sources – see Wikipedia:Verifiability.

   • - the article seems well sourced with a wide array of reference material.

2. The topic is treated in an obviously non-neutral way – see Wikipedia:Neutral point of view.

   • - no obvious NPOV tone to article.

3. There are cleanup banners that are obviously still valid, including cleanup, wikify, NPOV, unreferenced or large numbers of fact, clarifyme, or similar tags.

   • - no tags on page.

4. The article is or has been the subject of ongoing or recent, unresolved edit wars.

   • - no edit warring over article.

5. The article specifically concerns a rapidly unfolding current event with a definite endpoint.

   • - scope of article clear.

Article meets standards set out in the "quick-fail criteria", with no obvious issues or problems evident. Full review to follow. ✽ Familiae Watt§ ^(TALK) 04:39, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Main review assessment

Good read and interesting. Only a few issues to clear up.

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose):

   •  Done (Lead) "She was essentially a enlarged version of HMS Invincible with additional length added amidships to allow both 'P' and 'Q' turrets to fire on either broadside and a revised protection scheme."

   Words like "essentially" are frowned upon as they are not encyclopaedic. Additionally, I am not too sure about the words "admidships". Is it a precise nautical term or is it being used to refer to the middle of the ship, in which case can be changed. Suggested rewrite for sentence: "She was an enlarged version of the HMS Invincible design, with additional length added midship [or amidship] to allow both 'P' and 'Q' turrets to fire on either broadside and a revised protection scheme."

   •  Done (Lead) "When World War I began she was in the Mediterranean..."

   Suggest: "When World War I began HMS Indefatigable was in the..."

   •  Done (Pursuit of Goeben and Breslau) "Indefatigable, accompanied by Indomitable, under the command of Admiral Sir Archibald Berkeley Milne, encountered the battlecruiser Goeben and the light cruiser Breslau on the morning of 4 August 1914 headed east after a cursory bombardment of the French Algerian port of Philippeville, but Britain and Germany were not yet at war so Milne turned to shadow the Germans as they headed back to Messina to recoal."

   This is a long sentence and needs to be improved. Suggested rewrite: "Indefatigable, accompanied by Indomitable, under the command of Admiral Sir Archibald Berkeley Milne, encountered the battlecruiser Goeben and the light cruiser Breslau on the morning of 4 August 1914, heading east after a cursory bombardment of the French Algerian port of Philippeville. However Britain and Germany were not yet at war so Milne turned to shadow the Germans as they headed back to Messina to recoal."

   b (MoS):

   •  Done Article confirms to the WP:MOS, except it is overlinked, see: WP:OVERLINK. Words like "overall", "beam", do not need to be linked. Additionally, terms like the Mediterranean, which are very well known geographical words, do not need linking. Same as well known phrases, like "Declaration of War". Also, given that the 4-inch, 12-inch, and 18-inch turret guns are linked in the info panel, they do not need to be linked in the body of the article. The info-box is a good place for linking - and if terms are linked there, they do not generally need to be linked in the article elsewhere.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references):

   • Well referenced.

   b (citations to reliable sources)

   • Source 21 needs to include "publisher" tag.

   c (OR):

   • No evidence of OR

3. It is broad in its scope.

   a (major aspects):

   • Develops subject matter well.

   b (focused):

   • No digressions.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   • No POV problems.

5. It is stable.

   • No edit wars etc.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):

   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: Pass ✽ Juniper§ Liege ^(TALK) 18:29, 11 February 2010 (UTC)