Talk:HMS Howe (1885)/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:37, 9 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll finish this within two hours. JAGUAR 14:37, 9 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

The lead needs to be expanded somewhat to comply per WP:LEADLENGTH. A mention of her career etc would do it
- You've got almost the entirety of her career in the lede already. Leadlength says one or two paras for a 15K article; this one's only 6.2K.
"The Admiral class was built in response to French ironclad battleships of the Hoche and Marceau classes and Howe and her sister ship, Rodney, were enlarged and improved versions of Collingwood" - I think this sentence is too long to read comfortably and needs a break. How about something like The Admiral class was designed in response to French ironclad battleships of the Hoche and Marceau classes. Howe and her sister ship, Rodney, were enlarged and improved versions of Collingwood
- Agreed, I shouldn't have tried to tie them together.
"with the main ammunition hoists protected by armored tubes" - armoured
"...armored tubes with walls 12 inches thick" - convert to metric
- Converted on the first use in the Armament section.
"The deck of the central armored citadel" - armoured
No dead links
No dab links

I realise that my reviews of early Welsh battleships are short but I don't think it can be helped due to the length and solid writing of the articles! JAGUAR 19:11, 9 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I have no complaints, you're giving them a close-enough reading to catch my annoying lapses out of BritEng. Thanks for reviewing this one so promptly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:29, 9 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them quickly once again! I try to make my reviews as comprehensive as possible, although they get to the point. Anyway, promoted

JAGUAR 19:55, 9 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]