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GA Review

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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk) 11:08, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks interesting, should be able to complete a full review in next few days. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 11:08, 5 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Technical review

  • No dab links.
  • Not sure what value is added by the uboat.net external link.
    • Legacy, but gone now.

Prose

  • ...she encountered the German destroyers Z11 Bernd von Arnim and then Z18 Hans Lüdemann in the heavy fog before 08:00 a.m. -- Grammatically it looks a bit odd to have "then" where you do, given you have the descripter "German destroyers" embracing both. I assume you mean that Glowworm found one before the other but if the time difference between the two encounters wasn't too large I think you could easily lose this word -- doesn't seem vital.
    • It was in sequence, albeit fairly close, so I'm happy to lose the word.

Structure

  • Always prefer to see at least two subheaders under a section heading though I realise it's not simple with a mix of pre-war and early wartime stuff prior to the final battle. What if Career became Operational history and you gave the first part of the section an Early career subheader?
    • Works for me.

Coverage/Referencing

  • No issues.

Supporting materials

  • All images appropriately licensed and captioned.
  • Although not required, alt text might be worth adding.

Summary