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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:16, 7 April 2016 (UTC)
Will finish this tomorrow. JAGUAR 17:16, 7 April 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- Same with Plymouth, I would recommend cutting red links from the lead, but I'll leave that up to you
- "the ships were only lightly protected to maximize their speed" - maximise
- "Their conning tower was protected by four inches of armour" - convert to metric
- I was missing the initial conversion, but added now.
- "Fearless, fifth ship of that name to serve in the Royal Navy" - missing "the": the fifth ship of that
- "so it reorganized the Grand Fleet to make better to respond to further raids" - reorganised
- "on 9 March to command the successful search for the recently spotted submarine SM U-12 (Germany)" - why is Germany in brackets? Seems odd to me as ships like Victory (Royal Navy) aren't stylised like that in articles
- Mistake with the template.
- "on the 19th to serve as the depot ship for several British G-class submarines based there" - extremely minor, but I looked at the article and I think "G" is italicised
- Ordinarily you'd be right, but ship class names aren't italicized when they're not actually a ship name. There's not a ship named G, just ones named G-1, etc.
- No dead links
- Dab links OK
Once again, well written and comprehensive. On hold until all are clarified. JAGUAR 11:30, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for catching all the fussy little BritEng mistakes.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:05, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for addressing them once again. Promoted JAGUAR 18:55, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
- One problem, though: it's anachronistic to use metric for ships of this era, and that leads to conversion creep. Anmccaff (talk) 19:41, 9 April 2016 (UTC)