Talk:HMS Concorde (1783)/GA1
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Reviewer: —Ed!(talk) 22:44, 20 October 2010 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written:
- Hold
- The lead needs to be reworked. Right now it consists of a small graph summarizing the article followed by a longer one summarizing the same thing. It should be 2 or 3 graphs and summarize the entire thing only once.
- French Career: The use of time is inconsistent (6 o'clock, 8pm, 1.15pm) and needs to be standardized. I would recommend using four-digit time which is easier to read. Adding the local time zone (or UTC time) would also be helpful.
- "after an hour and three quarters of fighting, forced her to surrender" — that sounds odd. Can you change it to "X minutes" instead?
- The 'Later years' section is very short. I would suggest either expanding it or merging it with another section.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable:
- Pass no problems there.
- It is broad in its coverage:
- Pass no problems there.
- It follows the neutral point of view policy:
- Pass no problems there.
- It is stable:
- Pass no problems there.
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate:
- On Hold For the images, would it be possible to point out exactly which of the ships is supposed to be Concorde?
- To answer that, while I have a decent idea of which ship might be which, I'm not positive, so I'm probably not the right person to be adding that in. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:30, 23 October 2010 (UTC)
- On Hold For the images, would it be possible to point out exactly which of the ships is supposed to be Concorde?
- Overall:
- On Hold while a few things are sorted out. —Ed!(talk) 23:14, 20 October 2010 (UTC)
Issues fixed. I can ask the MILHIST project if they're able to figure out how to distinguish the ships in the pictures. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:38, 23 October 2010 (UTC)