Talk:HMS Brisk (1910)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 03:56, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review comment

I plan to review this article for GA class. The first issue I noticed is listed below. Other review comments will follow this one. Djmaschek (talk) 03:56, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Construction and career: "On 21 February, Brisk was escorting the troop ship SS Mendi off the coast of the Isle of Wight, when the cargo ship SS Darro struck the larger vessel in the fog." It should say that the SS Mendi (4,230 GRT) was the smaller vessel. Darro was 11,484 GRT. See SS Mendi article for data. Djmaschek (talk) 03:56, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Good spot. I meant the larger of the two, Brisk and Mendi but obviously it was not clear. I have reworded the section so hopefully that is better.

Review 1

When I conduct a GA review, all issues are listed, including those I would normally fix myself in a B class article. You may fix issues or argue your case if you disagree with me. Here are the issues. Djmaschek (talk) 11:55, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Meets 6 good article criteria: well-written, verifiable, broad, neutral, stable, illustrated. Done
Don't forget the issue listed under Initial review comment.
Introduction: "the British Isles,Brisk ended" (no space after comma)

Oops. Added.

Second photo has this notice: "You must also include a United States public domain tag to indicate why this work is in the public domain in the United States." Please add the required tag. I'm guessing it's this one: "PD-US-expired".

Tag added.

Design and description: Text and infobox match 100%. Done
Construction and career: In one place "U-84" is used while in another place "SM U-88" is used. Please be consistent.

Template fixed so they are the same.

Construction and career: "had to be towed back by" (back to where?) Suggest: "had to be towed back to port by".

Done.

Construction and career: "Brisk was decommissioned and place under" (placed under).

Corrected.

Construction and career: "The vessel was sold to be broken up to J Distin of Devonport on 15 November 1921." (This sentence is rather awkward.) Suggest: "sold for breaking up" Shouldn't there be a (.) after J?

Nice. I have amended the sentence.

@Djmaschek: Thank you for your review. I think I have addressed your concerns. simongraham (talk) 16:15, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Simongraham: GA class.

Done The U-88 link was red, but I fixed the problem. Djmaschek (talk) 20:18, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]