Talk:HMS Bridgewater (L01)/GA1
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 00:34, 16 September 2016 (UTC)
Well constructed, will get back shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 00:34, 16 September 2016 (UTC)
Section 1
[edit]- Para 3; Please reconsider the uses of comma(,)s in the first sentence. Presently, it reads "... shipyard on 6 February 1928 and was launched, without ceremony, on 14 September 1928" I advice
... shipyard on 6 February 1928, and was launched without ceremony on 14 September 1928
, because omitting them doesn't change the meaning and moreover many of them makes the reader confused. - Para 4; In the latter of the last sentence, please consider adding "was" before "increased". So it reads
.....the depth charge outfit was increased to 15 charges
.
Section 2
[edit]- Para 2; The sentence "Bridgewater had her second high-angle, four-inch gun installed during a refit there that was interrupted by the Munich Crisis of September 1938 when she was ordered to Freetown, Sierra Leone" is a bit confusing. As far I know, "high-angle four-inch gun" is a single one, then what is the need of using a comma, and consider adding a comma after there (..ing a refit there, that was inter..)
All good, and well written. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 12:32, 16 September 2016 (UTC) @Sturmvogel 66: Please address the issues. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 11:37, 29 September 2016 (UTC)
Apologies for my tardiness in responding to your comments. They were good ones, although I broke the sentence in your second point in half to improve readability. See how it reads now.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:40, 8 October 2016 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 01:59, 11 October 2016 (UTC)