Jump to content

Talk:HMS Algerine (J213)/GA1

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

[edit]
Successfully promoted on 4 May 2014. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 18:55, 4 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: TLSuda (talk · contribs) 18:02, 4 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I will be taking on this GA-review. I look forward to reading this article and should have comments up momentarily. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 18:02, 4 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Overall review

[edit]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


Very close, just a few minor things to address from by below prose review.
  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
    There are a few recommendations for polishing below.
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    Only wish there was more.
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    Almost there!


Prose review

[edit]

Lead

[edit]
  • HMS Algerine was the lead ship of her class of minesweepers... I would add the word "namesake" between her and class to make it more obvious what that meant. I had to click the wikilink to understand it.
  • ...she was torpedoed by the Italian submarine Ascianghi, with eight survivors. Instead of "with eight survivors," I would add "...causing her to sink leaving only 8 survivors.

Description

[edit]
  • At the end of the first paragraph of this section it says :(Lenton 1998, p. 261) I assume this should be a reference.

Career

[edit]
  • Her sister ships from the 9th Flotilla HMS Alarm and HMS Albacore joined her, along with HMS Acute, and HMS Cadmus. I would change "along with" to "as did" and if you can find out where they came from (what Flotilla or commission) I would include that at the end of the sentence.
  • ...commanded by Lieutenant commander Erler... I would include the lieutenant's first name. According to the Italian Wikipedia's article about the submarine, his name was Rino Erler.
  • The submarine had first fired two torpedoes at the middle ship in the trio... Do we know which was the middle ship?
    • Changed, but no further info available. Matty.007

Overall

[edit]