Talk:Håkons Hall/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ealdgyth - Talk 13:21, 16 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this article shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 13:21, 16 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Needs some spots of awkward prose fixed and some overlinking issues.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

General:
- WAY overlinked - you don't need nearly as many links as you've got here. Do you really need to link to Sweden? Canada? banquet? Golf? Also, the section events has duplicate links from the lead - which given the length of this article really isn't needed here. The folks haven't forgotten the links that quickly.
  - I've removed 'golf' and 'banquet' and all repeat links. As for the countries, they are links to the respective ice hockey or handball national teams, and are appropriate. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Lead:
- Expand the IIHF abbreviation in the second paragraph.
  - Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- What sort of team is Lillehammer IK?
  - Mentioned. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Construction:
- "After the town the same year was awarded the 1994 Winter Olympics, it became necessary to build a larger venue to hold the Olympic ice hockey matches." Awkward - suggest rewording the first part - perhaps "That same year, the town was awarded the 1994 Winter Olympics, which required the construction of a larger venue for the Olympic ice hockey matches."
  - Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- "Håkons Hall is named for Haakon Haakonarson, later king of Norway..." wouldn't it be simpler to say "a medieval king of Norway"?
  - Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Expand the UCI abbreviation in the third paragraph.
  - Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Expand the SINTEF abbreviation in the last paragraph
  - As Geschichte states below, this is their full name in English (and also now in Norwegian)—there is nothing meaningful it is an abbreviation for. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Facilities:
- "Håkons Hall is a multi-purpose arena located at Stampesletta in Lillehammer, Norway." This is a "duh" point here - you don't need to remention this in the body of the article - remove it.
  - Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- "For trade fairs, the venue offers 3,500 square meters (38,000 sq ft), in addition the VIP and lobby facilities." Do you mean "in addition to the VIP and lobby facilities"?
  - Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Events:
- "The match saw than 5,000 spectators, the record for Lillehammer IK." I think something is missing here, did you mean "The match saw more than ..."?
  - Fixed. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 13:53, 16 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding SINTEF: It has no meaningful English spelled-out name, its English name is indeed SINTEF. Geschichte (talk) 21:04, 17 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking the time to review the article. All has been seen to. Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:19, 19 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]