Talk:Gutta Percha Company/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:42, 12 September 2019 (UTC)
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- " natural rubber gutta-percha. Unlike other natural rubbers" I guess it's to avoid the WP:SEAOFBLUE but it does look odd to link "natural rubber" on the second occasion, particularly when it's so swiftly after the first instance.
- Partly for SEAOFBLUE and partly because "the natural rubber gutta-percha" is a noun phrase that works as a singgle unit. Having contiguous links would be very non-obvious to the reader who might not find gutta-percha at all. A solution might be to pipe the whole phrase. SpinningSpark 06:30, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
- Is there a reference for "Nothing else like it was available to manufacturing until well into the twentieth century when synthetic plastics were developed."?
- There are a few that could be used in the William Montgomerie article. Arrighi, p. 7 says that gutta-percha was replaced from 1930 onwards (but doesn't say what with) and Baker, p. 91 says it was replaced in 1930 with the newly-invented polyethylene. I did have an online source that explicitly said all that plus that there was nothing better until polyethylene, but right now I'm racking my brains to remember which article I put it in. I'll come back to this one. SpinningSpark 06:30, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
- The page I couldn't find yesterday is this, but I will cite with this book. Although the book doesn't explicitly say "nothing better until..." it's pretty much implied, plus it has more detailed dates of the history. SpinningSpark 09:49, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- There are a few that could be used in the William Montgomerie article. Arrighi, p. 7 says that gutta-percha was replaced from 1930 onwards (but doesn't say what with) and Baker, p. 91 says it was replaced in 1930 with the newly-invented polyethylene. I did have an online source that explicitly said all that plus that there was nothing better until polyethylene, but right now I'm racking my brains to remember which article I put it in. I'll come back to this one. SpinningSpark 06:30, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
- "and it rapidly became their main product. It had a near monopoly on the product" bit clunky, consider merge.
- "The world's first ocean crossing cable linked Dover to Calais in 1851. " this seems to be missing something.
- Changed to The world's first international telegraph connection under the sea, a link from Dover to Calais in 1851, used a cable made by the company. Any better? SpinningSpark 10:15, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- "Except for a few early cables, submarine cables" repeat of cable is jarring.
- Changed to Except for a few early ones... SpinningSpark 10:15, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- Is that statement referenced anywhere?
- Huurdeman p. 129, and Bright (more directly) p. 11. Pretty sure Haigh said it as well, but I've taken that book back to the library now. SpinningSpark 10:49, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- "products soon greatly expanded" -> was soon (the range didn't do it autonomously...)
- I think if you link terms like soda water, you ought to consider linking reasonably technical terms like "extrude".
- "for a 2-mile length" - convert for metric readers.
- "Submarine Telegraph Company wished" would add comma before wished here.
- "off Folkstone from " Folkestone has two e's.
- "for 25 nautical miles of " convert again.
- "Undeterred, a new order was..." who was undeterred here?
- Changed to Undeterred, the company placed a new order in 1850... SpinningSpark 11:37, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- " Siemens and Halske" seems to use the ampersand.
- " 1,300 nautical miles of" convert.
- I'm not sure how much the first two paras of the last section (Gutta-percha quality) relate directly to this company, they seem to be talking about the material itself with nothing directly relating to Gutta Percha Company.
- I would argue that this is about the quality of the product of the company, not of gutta-percha in general. It is mostly sourced to Charles Bright who was chief engineer to the Magnetic Telegraph Company, and later in charge of the transatlantic cable project of the Atlantic Telegraph Company. He represents a major customer of the Gutta Percha Company and is talking about the quality of their gutta-percha. SpinningSpark 11:21, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- That's not clear from the details there right now. The first two paras of that section appear to be completely unrelated. Perhaps you could state somewhere there what you've said, that these two paras relate explicitly to the gutta-percha produced by the Gutta Percha Company. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:45, 16 September 2019 (UTC)
- I've added some introductory text along those lines. If that's not good enough then I really don't have a solution. The material surely belongs on Wikipedia and I would be happy to move it to a more directly related page like Gutta-percha insulated cable, but that page doesn't currently exist. SpinningSpark 15:27, 17 September 2019 (UTC)
- That's not clear from the details there right now. The first two paras of that section appear to be completely unrelated. Perhaps you could state somewhere there what you've said, that these two paras relate explicitly to the gutta-percha produced by the Gutta Percha Company. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:45, 16 September 2019 (UTC)
- I would argue that this is about the quality of the product of the company, not of gutta-percha in general. It is mostly sourced to Charles Bright who was chief engineer to the Magnetic Telegraph Company, and later in charge of the transatlantic cable project of the Atlantic Telegraph Company. He represents a major customer of the Gutta Percha Company and is talking about the quality of their gutta-percha. SpinningSpark 11:21, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- Why is Willoughby Smith a "see also" for this company article?
- He was the chief engineer of the company and later of Telcon after the merge. He wrote a book on submarine telegraphy. SpinningSpark 10:59, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
That's all, not too many comments, but I am concerned a little bit over that generalist material on gutta-percha which doesn't seem directly relevant here. I'll put the nomination on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:59, 12 September 2019 (UTC)
- Is there anything else outstanding besides the quality section? SpinningSpark 15:27, 17 September 2019 (UTC)
- I don't know yet, I haven't a chance to review the article following your updates. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:01, 17 September 2019 (UTC)
Yes, the updates are satisfactory and the article now passes the GA criteria easily. Good work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:11, 18 September 2019 (UTC)