Talk:Gusen concentration camp/GA1
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Reviewer: K.e.coffman (talk · contribs) 01:51, 25 January 2020 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this article; will start shortly. --K.e.coffman (talk) 01:51, 25 January 2020 (UTC)
Points of clarification
[edit]...there were also large numbers of Spanish Republicans,...
-- please consider linking "Spanish Republicans". BTW, Spanish Republican (singular) redirect to Second Spanish Republic. I was not sure this would be the link you might want, so I did not link it myself.- Done
- This is a bit awkward:
Most Austrians…
[in 1918] &the Austrian people achieved their goal…
[in 1938] -- this implies to me that the very same Austrians advocated for the same goal twenty years apart. In addition, "the Austrian people" implies nationality rather than ethnicity; many of Austrian citizens probably did not want a union with Nazi Germany, especially not the Jewish population.- Fixed
The first prisoners and guards moved in on 25 May 1940, officially opening the camp.
-- suggest "The camp was officially opened on 25 May 1940, when the first prisoners and guards moved in". Otherwise, it reads like the inmates opened the camp.- Done, thanks
Because of the harsh conditions and mass murder, one group of prisoners would die to be replaced by another.
-- this is awkward, as "would" implies a future time and / or that there was causality between replacements and harsh conditions. I think what this sentence is trying to say is: SS did not care about high mortality due to abysmal conditions; they could simply replace the dead.- The source does not really say that, it emphasizes the waves/groups of prisoners. I changed it to
One group of prisoners would die, but the number was maintained due to transports of incoming prisoners.
- The source does not really say that, it emphasizes the waves/groups of prisoners. I changed it to
...were transported to the main camp to be gassed...
-- does the "main camp" refer to Mauthausen or Gusen I?- Mauthausen, clarified
known as "death group" due to the high mortality rate
-- known to whom?- Source does not say, so I took this out.
This "murderous brainstorming" was...
-- I assume it's a direct quote from the source. If so, it's better to attribute, i.e. This "murderous brainstorming", in the words of the historian X, was....- done
where fire brigade members were very willing to surrender...
-- if the (local) firemen were serving as guards then this should be mentioned. Otherwise, it's unclear what firemen were doing at the camp.- First mentioned in the SS command section but I added clarification here.
--K.e.coffman (talk) 23:35, 28 January 2020 (UTC)
- Many thanks for your comments and your excellent copyedit! buidhe 03:47, 30 January 2020 (UTC)
Assessment against GA criteria
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail: