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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 17:28, 8 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

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Infobox/Lead
  • The current promotional image is partly cropped on the right side where "Saturday, Octobe" is cut off; do you think this one may be more beneficial for the article? I see a very similar one is used on the Russian Wikipedia: [1]
  • I doubt there was a poster created for the film for promotional purposes (because it was just a made for TV movie), so instead of "Release poster" as the caption, I'd suggest changing it
  • "programs schedule for broadcast" --> "programs scheduled for broadcast
  • "Media commentators noted that the film marked a transition for Doherty away from her previous negative reputation." --> Before reading the rest of the article (to me), this sounds more like Doherty received negative feedback for her roles while in the article itself it seems like Doherty had just previously portrayed characters who were negative. I feel like this should be reworded, but I unfortunately cannot think of a worthy suggestion at the moment
  • Doherty actually earned a negative reputation for her behavior off the set; not sure why I worded it that way in the article. I have revised this to hopefully make more sense. Aoba47 (talk) 01:39, 20 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The program" --> This doesn't sound correct to me for some reason; perhaps I'm confusing it with a TV program which I usually consider a TV series/show
  • "which made it the second highest performing television movie on all ad-supported cable television networks." --> Is this just for the night or of all time? Please clarify
Plot
  • "Valleyville" --> Is this town located in Washington? I'd also clarify this too
  • "from the town know" --> "from the town known"
  • "The pair's pumpkin start growing larger" --> "The pair's pumpkin starts growing larger"
Production
  • "She contrasted this with the years in which she wrote and revised the script.[4]" --> Can you reword this as well? I'm confused what you mean by "with the years"
Broadcast history and release
  • "It received a Nielsen rating of 2.6 million viewers, which made it the second highest performing television movie on all ad-supported cable television networks." --> Like I previously mentioned in the lead, this is for the night–correct?
Critical reception
  • "(2000—07)" --> I believe there is some new part on Wiki's MoS that suggests this should be written as "(2000–2007)"
  • "film's plot could be deduced "just by mad-libbing the basic plot formula"" --> Maybe "film's storyline could be deduced "just by mad-libbing the basic plot formula"" since then 'plot' will not be used twice in a row
ON HOLD – Sorry this took so long. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 01:09, 20 May 2017 (UTC).[reply]
Aoba47 – I just did a check through the references and Reference #13 seems to be more of a blog, which probably shouldn't be included on Wikipedia because it's self-published. I realize you use this source three times in the article, but I don't think you should use it at all. What do you think? Carbrera (talk) 01:51, 20 May 2017 (UTC).[reply]
The rest looks great. #7 looked questionable but it comes from someone who was actually apart of the movie, which I find acceptable. Thanks for responding so quickly. Carbrera (talk) 02:04, 20 May 2017 (UTC).[reply]
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