Talk:Grove Park, Chiswick/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:12, 14 August 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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An unusually short review, but the page is on the short side (and does not suffer for it). Most of the issues have to do with commas and their use, especially the issues at User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences. I'd also like to see alt text on the remaining few images without it. This will not take long. 7-day hold to Chiswick Chap. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:12, 14 August 2022 (UTC)

Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:25, 14 August 2022 (UTC)

Copy changes

• St Paul's Church, built in 1872, is neo-Gothic, in irregular blocks of stone, with a small fleche instead of a spire, and an apse at its eastern end. Holy commas! The last one isn't needed (User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences, and the rest should be reflowed. Maybe The neo-Gothic St Paul's Church (1872) is built of irregular blocks of stone with a small fleche instead of a spire and an apse at its eastern end. (With some wikilinks for architectural terms.)

• Reworded; the remaining comma is essential to mark the apse as nothing to do with the fleche/spire issue. I've chosen to split the sentence rather than rush on from "of stone" to the fleche, as the issues are very different in character - that was, of course, what the comma between them was for. Personally I'd rather we kept that comma too, but a full stop does the job as well, if less fluently.

• from 1745 it belonged to the Earl of Grantham, and then to an eccentric animal-lover, Humphrey Morice Drop the comma after "Grantham"

• Done.

• it was demolished in 1928, and replaced by the houses on the west side of Kinnaird Avenue another C in S issue: drop the comma

• Done.

• ...was designed in 1872 by Henry Currey, and built at the expense... remove comma

• Done.

• newly-build should be newly built

• Done.

• It is made of irregular blocks of stone, and has an apse at its eastern end remove comma

• Done.

• Hyphenate "16th-century" but not "stained glass" or "crossing point"

• Done.

• Remove comma after (1902–1987)

• Gone.

• Comma after "Elmwood Road, Sutton Court" MOS:GEOCOMMA. The church article now lists as "Grove Park"; consider tweaking?

• OK, in that case we don't need the "Sutton Court", nor "Grove Park" since that's the scope of this article. I've fixed 3 instances.

• Comma after "Alamein" to complete the appositive

• Added.

Other

• Can't do spot checks on the offline sources.

• Noted.

• Earwig spots no issues.

• Thank goodness.

• The three non-gallery images need alt text (the 1880 map and last two images).

• Added. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:31, 14 August 2022 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.