Talk:Gregg Allman/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 13:18, 5 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 13:18, 5 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll copyedit as I go through; please revert if I make any mistakes.

A couple of points that are not issues for GA but you may wish to fix:
- [1] is a dead link
- There are some page ranges given that should be "pp." instead of "p."
which formed the basis of his acclaimed memoir My Cross to Bear: suggest cutting "acclaimed".
The band continued on, with Brothers and Sisters (1973) representing their largest sales: suggest "The band continued, with Brothers and Sisters (1973) their most successful album."
discovering artists such as Muddy Waters, which later became central to his musical evolution: should this be "who later became"?
Allman always maintained that Herring had told him to take the deal and he would take the fall for it: I don't follow this; what deal?
the first verse introduced a story, expounded upon it in the second, and the third may serve as an epilogue: needs a bit of tweaking: as it stands "the first verse" is the subject of "expounded".
Footnote 45 is to Freeman 1996, but there's nothing matching that in the sources list.

Generally this is in excellent shape. Once these points are fixed I will promote to GA. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 03:08, 6 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

hey mike, thanks for the great review and all your edits. i addressed all your points, and re-wrote the passage regarding scooter + "take the deal" or whatever -- i don't even remember what i was trying to say there, and i re-read the book i cited and couldn't decipher it either. thanks again! Saginaw-hitchhiker (talk) 07:04, 6 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

The fixes look good; promoting. Nice work. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 09:38, 6 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]