Talk:Gravity (Fred Frith album)/GA1

GA Review

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Hello, I will be reviewing this article. Check back soon for a full review! CarpetCrawler (talk) 18:45, 29 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA on hold

Overall, the article looks great! I have some concerns, however.

- "The album cover artwork on the original LP record was done by Alfreda Benge, Robert Wyatt's wife.[1]" Place this somewhere in the article, not in the lead. Especially since there should be no citations in the lead. The lead should be a summary of the information presented below it, not a place to put new information.

I moved this to a new section under Personnel. --Bruce1ee^talk 09:35, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

- The final sentence in the "Background" section should be placed in a paragraph, not all by itself.

I combined this with the last paragraph in the "Recording" section. --Bruce1ee^talk 09:35, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

- Same thing in the "Recording" section. The last paragraph should either be expanded or placed in another paragraph. Did the single chart on any charts? If so, you could place it and info about if it charted in the reception section.

I combined this with the last paragraph of the "Background" section. AFAIK the single did not chart anywhere, and I indicated this fact. --Bruce1ee^talk 09:35, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

- Same thing as above for the last paragraph of the reception section. It could be extended or placed in another paragraph.

I expanded it. --Bruce1ee^talk 09:35, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

- I think it might be a good idea to de-wikify the names that don't have articles in the "Personnel" section. More than likely they will never get articles on Wikipedia, and if they do you could always wikify the names later.

Done. --Bruce1ee^talk 09:35, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

- Same for the last paragraph of the "CD reissues" section, I think you should place it in the paragraph above it, or you could even put it in the "Reception" section.

I merged this with the paragraph above. --Bruce1ee^talk 09:35, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

When all of my concerns have been adressed, I will definitely pass this article. When you have addressed my concerns, please leave me a message on my talkpage. Thank you and good luck! CarpetCrawler (talk) 02:38, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing my nomination. I've addressed the issues you raised above, but if you still have some concerns, please let me know. --Bruce1ee^talk 09:35, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA pass

Congratulations, the article has passed its review! Great job! :) CarpetCrawler (talk) 21:23, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much. I appreciate your time. --Bruce1ee^talk 06:08, 2 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]