Talk:Graveyard Shift (SpongeBob SquarePants)/GA1

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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 18:18, 2 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will review.

""Graveyard Shift" is the 16th season two episode, and the 36th overall, of the American animated television series SpongeBob SquarePants." Reword this to ""Graveyard Shift" is the 16th episode of the second season of the American animated television series SpongeBob SquarePants." It's a little clunky in its current state.
- That was the sentence written before. I don't know who changed it to "a little clunky." BTW, Done Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"that the story is not true." Replace "not true" with "fictional."
- Done Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Squidward's story starts to happen" is informal; try "the events in Squidward's story begin to occur."
- Done Thanks! Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
No problems with the plot section -
- Thank you Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"However, the Count Orlok used in the episode..." should be "However, the image of Count Orlok used in the episode..."
- Done Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"This gag is the predecessor to the Nosferatu gag that concludes the broadcast episode, and Floorboard Harry initially flickers the lights." This sentence is lifted directly from the source. Could you reword it a bit?
- Done? Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Jason Bovberg called the episode "the spooky wonderfulness."" Huh? Rewrite this a bit; something like "Jason Bovberg praised the episode for its "spooky wonderfulness.""
- Done Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Bovberg stated the episode freaked out her daughter." Jason Bovberg is male. Also, "freaked out" should be changed to "scared."
- Fixed Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Fix these up, and you get a pass. For now, I'm placing it On hold. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 18:18, 2 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! I think everything's covered. I hope it will pass now. Thanks again! :) Mediran (t • c) 09:56, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Good work, promoted. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 01:04, 4 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for the pass! Cheers! Mediran (t • c) 09:03, 4 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]