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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 11:43, 24 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Progression

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  • Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
  • Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

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  • Citations: The Citation Check tool reveals no issues with reference consolidation (no action req'd).
  • Disambiguations: no dab links [3] (no action req'd).
  • Linkrot: no dead links [4] (no action req'd)
  • Alt text: one of the images lacks alt text so you might consider adding it [5] (not a GA requirement, suggestion only).
  • Copyright violations: The Earwig Tool reveals no issues with copyright violations or close paraphrasing (seems to be picking up combinations of proper nouns and common words which cannot be avoided) [6] (no action req'd).
  • Duplicate links: no duplicate links to be removed (no action req'd).

Criteria

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  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    • Prose is a little repetitive here: "In the late 1920s he rejoined the Nazi Party and joined the paramilitary Sturmabteilung (SA) in 1931." Perhaps consider something like: "In the late 1920s he rejoined the Nazi Party and became a member of the paramilitary Sturmabteilung (SA) in 1931."
    • "After the murder of SA leader Ernst Röhm in July 1934..." I'm assuming Berger wasn't involved in this but I wonder if someone might get the wrong idea from the wording adopted?
    • The prose here is also a little repetive: "After the Balkan Campaign of April 1941, the LSSAH was expanded to divisional strength, and after the invasion of the Soviet Union commenced, a sixth Waffen-SS division...", consider instead something like: "After the Balkan Campaign of April 1941, the LSSAH was expanded to divisional strength, and following the commencement of the invasion of the Soviet Union, a sixth Waffen-SS division..."
    • Date range format is incorrect per WP:DATERANGE, for instance "1939–1940" should be shortened to "1939–40".
    • Some inconsistency in the presentation of figures, for instance: "more than 1000 Romanian Volksdeutsche" vs " The "national legions" each numbered 1,000" (see MOS:NUM for guidance).
    • "Himmler was lukewarm on his initial proposal, but as casualties started to mount in 1942, Himmler changed his mind...", consider more simply: "Himmler was lukewarm on his initial proposal, but as casualties started to mount in 1942, he changed his mind..."
    • I made a few tweaks [7] to fix a few obvious typos etc.
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    • The article seems to be well referenced with all major points supported by an inline citation
    • No issues with OR I could see.
    • A couple of minor issue with referencing:
      • The Nicholand Rennell work appears in the references list but does not appear to have been used as a short citation. Should it be moved to a "further reading" section?
      • In the references section I wonder if it is necessary to use constructions like "New York, New York". I realize you are following a consistent presentation of locations with city and state; however, it is generally not required for internationally renown cities. It also creates a almost silly situation in one instance where the reference information reads: "New York, New York: New York University Press" (suggestion only).
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    • The article seems to cover all major aspects of the topic in some detail but doesn't go into unnecessary detail.
  • It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
    • No issues I could see.
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
    • No issues here.
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
    • Images seem to be free / PD and have the req'd information / templates.
    • Captions look fine.
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