Talk:Gorilla City (The Flash)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Argento Surfer (talk · contribs) 21:30, 9 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

It may take me a couple days to get through every item on this list. If you disagree with any of my comments, don't hesitate to argue them - I'm willing to be persuaded. Once complete, I'll be using this review to score points in the 2018 wikicup. Argento Surfer (talk) 21:30, 9 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Lead
"Earth-2" is name-dropped but not explained. I think swapping it for "an alternate Earth" (or similar) would be ideal, but a link to Earth-Two#Television could also work.
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Plot
"Jesse Wells explains" to whom?
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"Barry Allen remembers that in the future" - A phrase or clause needs to be added to explain this to readers who haven't followed the series.
I've clarified it but it's a given that readers of this article have seen the series. - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"captured by Grodd." - who is Grodd? A brief introduction/description is needed here. The article never actually identifies him as a Gorilla until the second-to-last paragraph.
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"Grodd says that he used " - says to whom? Why not just "Grodd uses..."?
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"Barry has Caitlin use her powers to fake his death," - suggest "Caitlen uses her powers to fake Barry's death,"
Because it is not shown Caitlin doing it. - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"he resuscitates himself" - as someone unfamiliar with Caitlen's powers, this isn't clear. Since the manner of the fakery isn't described, I suggest striking this in favor of "After Grodd leaves, Barry frees the others..."
Clarified - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"to compel Joe West to commit suicide with his own gun; however, Barry pushes Joe out of the way in time." - does it matter that it's his own gun? I think "to compel Joe West to shoot himself, but Barry pushes Joe out of the way of the bullet." reads better.
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Production
"Sean Poague appears as Accelerated Man, a Speed Force Conduit " - what's a Speed Force Conduit? It needs to be explained if it's essential for the article. If it just means he's fast, I think identifying him as a Flash is sufficient.
Changed to "speedster". - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Release
"The first part "Attack on Gorilla City" aired on February 21, 2017, and concluded with part two "Attack on Central City" on February 28, both on The CW" - Either add commas before and after the episode titles or simplify as "The CW aird "Attack on Gorilla City" on February 21, 2017 and "Attack on Central City" on February 28."
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"will be released on Blu-ray and DVD on September 5, 2017" - did this come out?
Fixed - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

The BD and DVD release sentence isn't chronological with the streaming release. Is there a reason for them to be presented backwards?
Fixed - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Reception
"The story has not yet been fully told, and we’ll have to wait until next week to find out exactly how much ape mayhem this show is really prepared to deliver" - I don't think this line adds anything to the article.
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

There's quite a bit of discussion about the CGI's success. I think a well-chosen screen capture from a CGI-heavy scene would improve the article. If you can't find one (or don't agree), it won't sink the GA nom.
I do agree that it would be nice to have an image, maybe one showing a before/after of a scene with CGI. Will try to find one and add it when I can. - Brojam (talk) 05:27, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"Waiting for Grodd-o" should link to Waiting for Godot. Not everyone will know that reference.
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

External links
no concerns.

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
no concern
Is it verifiable with no original research?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
Neither IGN (2 instances) nor TV by the Numbers (3 instances) are linked in the references.
Fixed - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
no concern

C. It contains no original research:
no concern

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Earwig has some high results (5 were 40%+, 2 were 60%+), but these were all properly attributed quotes.
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
no concern

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
no concern
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
no concern
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
a split proposal was discussed but ruled out 9 months ago. No signs of ongoing edit wars or vandalism.
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
no concern

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
The image needs WP:ALTTEXT.
Done - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Pass pending points raised above. Argento Surfer (talk) 19:23, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Argento Surfer: I've addressed all your comments above. - Brojam (talk) 05:24, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Pass - nice work, and I look forward to seeing whatever image you choose. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:11, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]